Aaron_Hand_4795

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Thanks for the chapter, just started to read through and can tell there’s some early faults that others haven’t picked up, mainly around % of earnings or copywrite. Story seem to have good potential but I would recommend changing some of these earlier mistakes, no doubt that would b annoying for you but would be worth it.

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Last two chapters have the wrong ending

Tftc, good chapter shows he still has room for growth and it can’t all go his way

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Tftc, like the little differences you’ve made from the translation

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