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ChaosLegion555

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  • ChaosLegion555
    ChaosLegion5554 days ago
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    I just want to know when. it feels like a chapter or two is missing. There's no explanation for them being there at all.

  • ChaosLegion555
    ChaosLegion5559 days ago
    Replied to NbRust

    I actually think it's a decent twist on things. My biggest contention is his name is Alan Ford, which does not in any way scream. I'm Asian. Which leads to my biggest peer about stories that is so big that unless the story is so entertaining and good I can ignore it I will drop the story there and that is character names in settings if they don't fit I'm out. perfect example from a Naruto ff the names just don't mesh you have Naruto Uzumaki speaking with Uchiha Xun yang or other out there names that take the clan names from naruto but use Chinese names for all the background not specifically named characters.

  • ChaosLegion555
    ChaosLegion5559 days ago
    Replied to Fluf_Bacon

    The writing quality is indeed good. However, there are some minor issues that are more of an annoyance than anything, like some names of background characters being changed between chapters, same with some ways of address like Kushina calling Tsunade Tsunade-nee and Tsunade-sis while it's not the end of the world because of that it is a big annoyance especially when for a few chapter it's one then it switches to the other for some chapters and than switch's back it's very inconsistent which is annoying not to mention that calling people with sis or bro at the end doesn't really fit either use it at the start( e.i. sis Tsunade )or don't use sis and instead use nee plus it being Japanese themed in terms of naming makes the most sense. But I'm just nit picking it all around it's fairly decent so far my biggest concern is A that tiny little things like that keep popping up and not being addressed, thus degrading the overall quality of the story and B this story may have been drop because as of my posting this no updates for over 2 weeks and webnovel doesn't give a time for the next chapter. but I hope what I have to say is helpful to the author and wish the best for all future chapters and stories.

  • ChaosLegion555
    ChaosLegion55510 days ago
    Replied to Alfiemooon

    And even after they did it came at heavy loses for them which was a major factor of why the official ninja war took a couple more years before it kicked off.

  • ChaosLegion555
    ChaosLegion55510 days ago
    Replied to nicholas8293

    Honestly I don't see what issue you are going on about with the whole harem aspect there aren't explicit other than implied or signs of affection like kissing on the check and even that's HEAVILY dispersed through the book. The harem aspect is a tamer version of the OS and just shows, and adds to, Momongas character that he does have feelings and cares for people and is not fully suppressed emotionally.

  • ChaosLegion555
    ChaosLegion55510 days ago
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    I've read past 200 chapters so far. It is an amazing story that is pulled off really well I'm used to only see people pull nazarick and momonga but the twist of adding some of his closest friends as well was really well done I've not seen it happen before other than in a shitty Chinese ff, like to the point you can barely read the paragraph let alone chapter kinda shitty. If there are any complaints I may have about it it's that some of momongas biggest defining things aren't there good example momonga has items that can revive the dead and servants of the tomb as well and neither is used not to mention he tends to be more evil than he is in the OS but it's a kind of evil you can respect and get behind so I applaud the author on that I know it can be a very fine line making a good villain. I feel that the evil could be toned back if the items and abilities were used and it would be a decent way to make people submit not to mention really hit home being the lord of death although I suppose if you take the revival item and the tombs ability to spend gold to revive servants away Momongas actions are understandable if you take into account the miniarc were they let people invade the tomb on purpose to expose themselves to the world in the OS his actions make sense and feel right.

  • ChaosLegion555
    ChaosLegion55516 days ago
    Replied to Markus_Storm

    It's not even about trying to remember things or forgetting them over time because they are not used there are arguably 4 or 5 spells all wizards should be able to do after graduation and still be able to do no matter what. 1 Protego self defense it's kinda obvious. 2 Apporation traveling long distance 3 Stupify Stunning spell also good for self-defense 4 Expelliarmus Disarming charm again good for self-defense 5 Accio more on the optional side, especially the wandless version simply so you can call your wand back if you become disarmed. These are very simple spells that everyone should know and they keep within Dumbledores harm free preferences because no one can argue that Dumbledore didn't have a hand in weakening the magical community in terms of spells while being headmaster he has full control of what's readily available and what's not in the library and we all know his distaste for dark magic so of course he wouldn't want to spread anything he considers dark magic.

  • ChaosLegion555
    ChaosLegion55516 days ago
    Replied to mutekishifu

    How you 5 star this trash I don't know but to each there own. All I'm going to say is if they can't even be bothered to follow the naming scheme of the source material, in this case being Naruto, then that just speaks for itself the level of none fucks given and garbage it is it's really bad when the two names are lined up together in sentences. "Should I Uzumaki Naruto call you Uchiha Xun Yang brother from now on" or referring to the sharingan as the kaleidoscope.