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Black_Reeper27minReplied to IHaveNoNamingSenseBro ur release rate is crazy, keep up the good work and dont burn urself out…
Chapter 24: The Underground Organization in the World of Naruto- Black_Reeper29minReplied to Black_Reeper
- Black_Reeper1dReplied to Krulsch
Ok let me break it down for ya, idk about u but I’ve read my fare share of fanfics and novels with little siblings or sisters in general, and I honestly cannot tell u a single one of them that wrote some quality stuff that has to do with the said sibling , it always goes to the clishe of the entire world now wanna mess with the MC’s sibling and the MC turns super saiyan with burning rage and now has to go kill that persons entire bloodline and the cycle keeps repeating throughout… Now there is the slim chance this author could do it right but from what I’ve read so far I highly doubt it and I can’t be bothered reading another one of those… If u like it tho just read whatever u enjoy reading…
Even if she wasn't really my sister, but the sister of the old Tywin, I couldn't help shake the feelings that he had for her. Tywin had doted on her, to him she held a very special place. With that had to swallow hard and very slowly from what he heard next. - Black_Reeper2dReplied to FearTcb
- Black_Reeper2dReplied to FearTcb
Are u using AI?
Children ran past him, their laughter infectious as they chased each other in a game of tag. Kaizen watched them closely, silently assessing their movements and behaviors. The carefree nature of their interactions was both foreign and fascinating to him. He could see genuine friendships, the simple joys of childhood that he had never experienced. - Black_Reeper2dReplied to Black_Reeper
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Not really a full review but just wanted to say this after the first 10 chapters. First and foremost, idk if this is the authors writing style or this is AI generated but there is no way a real human being can sit down and write the same thing over and over again every chapter, like literally every 2 sentences the author writes that the MC is analysing whats around him and talking about the future or opportunities or potential or friendship, like no joke u might read the same sentence a hundred times every chapter, there’s more about the MC speculating in his head than the MC actually doing anything, like I’d say a ratio of 10 to 1…. Also as usual now a days, the MC is a cold blooded assassin who murderd poeple his whole previous life but the moments he transmigates, he’s the nicest most heart warming 4 year old you’ll ever see…
- Black_Reeper2dCommented
We understand, u don’t have to repeat it a million times….
As he prepared to move on to the next phase of the entrance exam, Kaizen's mind was already formulating new strategies, new ways to push himself further. He had shown his talent without restraint, and he would continue to do so, keeping his true thoughts concealed, always ready to adapt and overcome. - Black_Reeper2dCommented
Well ur an adult so you’ll never experience it again, unless u wanna regress ur brain and have fun with 4 year olds…
Children ran past him, their laughter infectious as they chased each other in a game of tag. Kaizen watched them closely, silently assessing their movements and behaviors. The carefree nature of their interactions was both foreign and fascinating to him. He could see genuine friendships, the simple joys of childhood that he had never experienced. - Black_Reeper2dCommented
Or lead the family…
The Blante family would be his solid backing. He planned to delay the family's downfall as much as possible while taking what he wanted. - Black_Reeper2dCommented
Hopefully not far…
'I'm curious to see how far MMA techniques will work here.' - Black_Reeper2dCommentedHe was confident. Ethan, or rather, Ryu, had never known defeat.
- Black_Reeper2dCommented
Here comes the clishe 0 IQ characters, these characters really reflect the intelligence and the imagination of their authors, unimaginative retards…
"…Are you mocking me? How dare a pig like you insult me?" - Black_Reeper2dCommented
Ok relax, that’s too much…
"I told you because I see you as a genuinely kind figure, someone I can trust with everything." - Black_Reeper2dCommented
Now we’re talking, author got me hooked for 100 chapters minimum…
As a Jonin, he instantly understood what had happened, A kunai had been stabbed into his back, severing the spinal cord between the fourth and fifth lumbar vertebrae. It's an enemy! But the enemy is already… - Black_Reeper2dCommented
Where’s the rest of his ninja, they just watching him get killed?
"Aaaargh!" In a moment of crisis, the Kumogakure's Jonin's ferocity was ignited. His robust physique exploded with strength, and like a maddened beast, he tore the kunai from his hands and grabbed Tetsuro's waist with an outstretched arm. - Black_Reeper2dReplied to Milk_Hunter
Or run away, this should be used by the author to show that war takes no sides, and it doesn’t matter if ur with the MC or against him, Shinobi die in war….
Tetsuro's expression darkened, helplessly watching his comrade suffer. - Black_Reeper3dCommented
Yup, that right there puts this fanfics in the trash category….
Even if she wasn't really my sister, but the sister of the old Tywin, I couldn't help shake the feelings that he had for her. Tywin had doted on her, to him she held a very special place. With that had to swallow hard and very slowly from what he heard next. - Black_Reeper23dCommented
Author how about creating some new characters from ur imagination? There is only so little u can do with the game characters, night city is massive and u can make up ur own storylines, new gangs, small corps, random encounters, new female leads, new contractors to get jobs from…If u just use the game’s storyline and characters, it will get boring and unimaginative…Like get him in a phase where he’s working with corps from militich then working for gangs or mercenary, like he’s young and has to build up reputation…Of course in the end it’s still ur fanfic and this is only a suggestion…
AN - Regarding the first fight scene, I kept it short because the way Nooa is now, he wouldn't have lasted in a longer fight scene as magically dodging all the bullets seemed unreasonable. Taking advantage of the minimap and ambush seemed like the best way, as everyone pretty much seemed opposed to joining the Claws. I might have to bring Panam into the picture sooner as he needs some company, and coping in his room doesn't make for a good story.