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silv8mthCommentedi know i am new to reading online novels and such...but it's my first time connecting and understanding an Ai "feelings" i can tell that the author is talented.
This paragraph has been deleted.- silv8mthCommentedAlthough there wasn't much gore to it as the disintegration was instantaneous, without any body parts scattering, a human exploding is still a human exploding! If that scared the shit out of everyone, what followed after was something that threw the world into complete chaos.
- silv9mthReplied to silv
- silv9mthPosted
Okay.... I will be honest when I started reading I was a bit excited to read about a Zoan fruit user. after reading chapter 1 I thought that the author writing style was only going to be like that for the first chapter rushed rarely getting talking about the characters emotions or his acceptance of the world of one piece. talking about worlds we know next to nothing about his personality we don't know his background or how he lived on earth. so far to me this character feels kind of like cardboard 2D even I can't seem to care about what he does. In fact as far as I have read ( till chapter 5) all the characters where introduce briefly and we're rarely expended. in fact I don't believe the mc has talked to any of the characters (straw hat crew) to at least get a hint of his personality. of course we already get a hang of the straw hat crew personality but come on at least introduce your character personality. then there is plot so far you haven't explained to us why exactly does straw hat we're looking for that fruit it was kinda of out character for them. I guess you just needed your MC to have some sort of connection to them. but anyways I know you might know have a lot of experience in writing but I recommend you take a look around the site to at least get a hang of how to develop a story because so far this story has potential but it's being stopped by your lack of experience. honest review here
- silv9mthReplied to essitam
i get your pain. playing cod at night with light off and some random due throws a flash grenade...it's really annoying
"Well it creates a super bright flash of light that blinds everyone nearby , unfortunately the caster is included in that number as well. At the moment I'm figuring out how to exclude myself from the effects but it's slow going." Nick explained calmly. "That's sounds irritating , I mean can you image just randomly getting blinded while you are going about your day?" Tracy said with a shiver. Harry laughed "You'll get what I have to go through everyday then , I don't wear these glasses for show you know." he said with a smirk. 'Wow he really does take after his friends rather heavily.' Nick thought seeing Harry act like him a little.- - silv9mthCommentedThe entire class had Herbology next till 11 which was lunch time and then they had to come back to herbology till 2. After that it was a free period until dinner which was like all meals , optional at Hogwarts. Nick no sooner left the potions classroom with Daphne and Tracy then Ron showed up with Harry and weirdly enough Hermione who definitely didn't belong in the group yet. "How can you sit with these bloody snakes!?" Ron asked angrily.
- silv9mthReplied to JohnSmithRealName
What are you talking about? given the circumstance of the Mc it's normal to be thank full and some times a hug shows that emotion well.My father works as a surgeon and even he told me he can't count how many times he was hugged by people because of how thankful they are to have been saved. to relate that to the story we see here that Lilith literary reignited hope for MC that his family could alive resulting in a hug out of pure emotional outburst.In what world is that cringe? pls post this type of comment of you lack EQ.
He advanced with a big step to the chair where Lilith was sitting and hugged her gently as he said softly, "Thank you..." - silv9mthReplied to silv
- silv9mthPosted
I know I'm late but I got to say this is the best demon Slayer fanfic I have read in a long time. the story was so captivating the writing was so beautiful it grabbed my attention the first few words. it's a shame that it was dropped my heart can't take it I broke a few house equipment when I saw the last time it was updated. you're writing me my day thank you!
- silv9mthReplied to SlimeSage
oh...well I hope you manage that well then because I am counting on you to make a great story...have a great day!
• There's a possibility of this fanfic being a harem. Keyword 'possibility' so it's not yet confirmed but there's a high chance. - silv9mthPosted
*my first reviewe 😁*So far it's been great reading this story.The dialogue has a nice flow to it although it could still be improved as it felt a little rushed as if trying to force a change in mood (reference chapter 2-3.) and I like the author for giving himself some room for development of his story can't wait to see more of his writing. I am rooting for you. 😁
- silv9mthCommentedCh 2 Ch. 2 - An Angel can't venture without his wings
- silv9mthCommentedCh 1 Ch. 1 - Death is the beginning of a journey
- silv9mthCommented
i have been confused about this aspect why do people hate harems? i am pretty new here so would someone explain it to me so I know what going on. thank you 😊
• There's a possibility of this fanfic being a harem. Keyword 'possibility' so it's not yet confirmed but there's a high chance. - silv9mthCommented
A moment of silence for those who dropped this before they got this explanation.
These students were not talking nonsense. Jiryoku had earned the reputation of being a devil because whenever someone showed disdain towards him or made fun of his blindness, he made that person miserable in a fight. This caused the students to fear him. The main reason he created a narrow-minded persona for himself was that even if people from the Hyuga clan or Danzo doubted that he was suppressing his anger and hiding his shrewdness, they would not have this doubt anymore. Someone with such a narrow mind could not contain his anger and hide his emotions.