the_idyllic_scribe
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i apologize for how long it took me to respond!1) my book is about to continue being posted, but it might be a little different from before
if it cant be put in a pocket im sad
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oh? alright! username- dreamscraper
it gets confusing to even those outside the US
this isnt realistic dialogue
dont say tom do much. it gets repetitive
*helpless
writing your main character as 'hopeless' doesnt make people thjnk ur chsrscter is. show or describe. font tell
use " anf not '. Readers won't knoe if its thoughts or actual words
this is kinda better. but once sgain. you're judt explaining. its not going to hook anyone
too many descriptdion make the story drag
show dont tell