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ok so they know hes being attacked and for some reason the same govt that threatens everyone as soon as they get power is letting a newbie fight theur elite for how long? im not exactly convinced why its taken this long to prove wrong doing? they are attacking and threatening his family and they are guardians what else do they need?
you could of had him upgrade this when he fixed orphanage
author i feel like alot of ur story is basically stuff u have problems with other writer stories. i get wanting to address those problems with the whole system genre but u also have to remember to make ur own story good. like i feel likecthe last 10 chapters or so is just info dumps and u addressing problems in other stories. like u have to push ur own story along and honestly i have fallen asleep trying to read last few chapters.
it would of been hilarious if he called it quantum ramen.