Hank_9794

why didnt he use bite?

author is based love it

its because she thought he didnt even know who she was and all of a sudden sbe finds put he does and knows her name

fair enough usually i drag authors for reviewing their own books but urs passes the vibe check

ok so they know hes being attacked and for some reason the same govt that threatens everyone as soon as they get power is letting a newbie fight theur elite for how long? im not exactly convinced why its taken this long to prove wrong doing? they are attacking and threatening his family and they are guardians what else do they need?

you could of had him upgrade this when he fixed orphanage

author i feel like alot of ur story is basically stuff u have problems with other writer stories. i get wanting to address those problems with the whole system genre but u also have to remember to make ur own story good. like i feel likecthe last 10 chapters or so is just info dumps and u addressing problems in other stories. like u have to push ur own story along and honestly i have fallen asleep trying to read last few chapters.

last few chaters have gotten boring

author what country are u from? because when u write about anerica it just screams wrongness. it sounds like u have heard stories about america but not really. casinos dont rehect anyone. they let u bet ur last nickle in a nickle slot. they dont care.

it would of been hilarious if he called it quantum ramen.