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Pixxie_Mysteria999

Pixxie_Mysteria999

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  • Pixxie_Mysteria999
    Pixxie_Mysteria999a year ago
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    This story is quite interesting for me to read and I quite liked it. The only problems I have with it are the grammar; everything else is great and keep up with a good work.

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  • Pixxie_Mysteria999
    Pixxie_Mysteria999a year ago
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    This is such a sad chapter but a great one at best, so keep with a good work.

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  • Pixxie_Mysteria999
    Pixxie_Mysteria999a year ago
    Commented

    These three sentences need to be eliminated, and the second one needs to be rewritten as "You'll see for yourself."

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  • Pixxie_Mysteria999
    Pixxie_Mysteria999a year ago
    Commented

    These two sentences should be eliminated.

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  • Pixxie_Mysteria999
    Pixxie_Mysteria999a year ago
    Commented

    Replace exclamation mark with question mark.

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  • Pixxie_Mysteria999
    Pixxie_Mysteria999a year ago
    Commented

    Italics, not quotation marks.

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  • Pixxie_Mysteria999
    Pixxie_Mysteria999a year ago
    Commented

    Another great chapter.

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  • Pixxie_Mysteria999
    Pixxie_Mysteria999a year ago
    Commented

    The next two dialogues needs to be together.

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  • Pixxie_Mysteria999
    Pixxie_Mysteria999a year ago
    Commented

    All three dialogues needs to be combined in one.

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  • Pixxie_Mysteria999
    Pixxie_Mysteria999a year ago
    Commented

    Space

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