Lazy_guy_nearby

This novel is really good, but you still have a lot of areas to improve. First, you should increase the word count of each chapter — even if it’s just by half its current size. Second, explain more about the Yin System and expand its abilities. At the same time, you can add unique powers for the protagonist, like using Yin and Yang energy to evolve his life level. Also, don’t fully merge him into the Naruto universe. For example, instead of giving him an Otsutsuki clan bloodline, create a unique bloodline just for him. Just make him truly stand out. You also need to help him grow stronger — right now, you should let him rise in power quickly. Third, we all know that wealthy people in Naruto are respected, so you should help him fully take ownership of Kaiza’s wealth. Fourth, read more novels — and I’m sure you know exactly the kind I’m talking about… hehehe 😏 Note: If you have any questions, feel free to ask me — I might be able to help too.

Your novel is really beautiful — both the writing and the language level are perfect. The structure was also amazing. I hope you continue and don’t abandon the story like those other dog authors!

I stopped at ch 397 i think?🤔 And then i never saw a new chapter so I dropped it

So there is no Immortality or something like that right?

I noticed that each chapter takes a year to come out, and I hope you read my comment. I wish you would continue! This fanfiction has a very high potential, but you have a few small issues that you can resolve, which are as follows: 1- The chapter is very short. 2- You should add more of your own ideas, diversify the world, and use your imagination while maintaining a plot that is both close to and distant from the original anime. 3- Please don’t stop publishing. Believe me, I’ve read thousands of novels, and you could say I’m a true immortal, and you have great potential. Just keep going. If you work on these three points, I bet everyone will love your story, especially since the manga for the anime has a lot of chapters, and the anime has three seasons as well. You could say it’s like gold on a platter waiting to be written. Simply put, dear author, you must keep going 😭😭😭

I really loved this novel, from the world-building to the storytelling, the conversations between the characters, everything truly reached a level that makes it a top-tier novel. Well done, author. Keep up your work.

Damn, you are merciless.

Firstly, I wasn't good at the beginning when I wrote my novel just for fun, but then it became my hobby. I try to write and keep writing one chapter every day. I'm not arrogant, but I know I'm the best🙄😂. This account is a side account for reading the novels I love, not the one where I write my novel.