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FanFic_Listener9 months agoReplied to Wolf25again... I am not saying it's bad. I'm saying it's a bit confusing. if you need help, download the natural reader app, copy & paste your notes onto it and have it read it back to you, it has helped me many times. (you'd be surprised how many times I typed small mistakes or autocorrect chose to be a bastard. it helps to clean up the mistakes) (bootleg grammarly) just now = "it has helped ne many times" fixed ne to me. anyway I hope this helps.
- FanFic_Listener9 months agoPosted
within 6 chapters you removed the sinister six... besides null who will Peter go up against? (that will give spider-man a REAL challenge). how old his felicia (she comes off as a predator). give more details about this Peter's background in the synopsis (had me assuming this was Tobey's spider-man just to then be blindsided that you started describing may as Tom's "hot" aunt). why is he surprised by the second kiss that gwen gave him (when he just got done passionately kissing her)? . . all-in-all your writing isn't bad but maybe writing in a way of a check list with a "attention to detail" mindset. the story has promise (I like that you're combining scenarios from tom,Andrew,Tobey, & games)
- FanFic_Listenera year agoReplied to FanFic_Listener
also it would have been a comedic moment if they walked out to notice everyone giving them the "I know what you two were just doing look". because they are in an isolated area with no sound protective walls and other living huts close enough to hear every thrust impact and loud moaning that they are clearly doing ...
- FanFic_Listenera year agoCommented
I'm a little disappointed that the system didn't suggest the healing water technique but if makes sense he would get it this evolution
- FanFic_Listenera year agoCommented
most definitely more that an hour long for it to be a singular chapter
- FanFic_Listenera year agoReplied to FanFic_Listener
to be honest I could say I'd like to see a system like this be given to characters like Haku Yuki make even Sasuke Uchiha for shits n giggles
- FanFic_Listenera year agoPosted
good grammar, good system idea, In my opinion... it was like the system was developing too quickly, like the system was two sided, for example the sims games "but with extra steps". a trap snowball effect.
- FanFic_Listenera year agoPosted
this is horrible, easily the worst thing I was unfortunate to hear, if you are capable of reporting it to get it taken down please do so
- FanFic_Listenera year agoPosted
this FanFiction is very well written, it's unfortunate that it has practically been dropped
- FanFic_Listener2 years agoReplied to Na1gel
"I am not a writer, I am placing thumbs-to-text because the idea are in my head. please let me know if you wish to "take the wheel" because I'm a fanfiction "listener"... I'd much rather just listen to "10 hour" Text-to-Speech fanfictions on YouTube
