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LanumKing

LanumKing

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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing1mth
    Commented

    decent first chapter

    Ch 1 The Great Fall
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    Divine Contest
    Fantasy · Djeezer
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing3mth
    Replied to Royal_Red1

    I will expect something Monday i actually rerote a few things

    Ch 8 Harsh Reality made clear
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    The Sleepwalker
    Urban · LanumKing
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing3mth
    Replied to Royal_Red1

    reallyy? well I'm actually returning to it but ima delete the chapters and repost. dw ima coing back in meantime join my discord

    Ch 8 Harsh Reality made clear
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    The Sleepwalker
    Urban · LanumKing
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing5mth
    Replied to Villainess_rule

    she threw it in the bin

    Ch 7 A Turning Point In Our Lives.
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    The Sleepwalker
    Urban · LanumKing
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing5mth
    Replied to Ender_Peach

    we dont need to care about that world anymore

    "Well, not really. When you were running from the goblin I did a rough scan of your brain. Remember when I said "Done"? That's when I finished the brain scan. Pretty sad life story by the way." Peach explained.
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    Manipulating Odds in an Apocalyptic World
    Fantasy · Ender_Peach
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing5mth
    Commented

    out of stamina already

    She was running out of stamina, her vision was beginning to blur and her legs were beginning to fail on her but at least she gained some distance from the goblin.
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    Manipulating Odds in an Apocalyptic World
    Fantasy · Ender_Peach
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing5mth
    Replied to Villainess_rule

    assuming you mean who left her the yellow scarf that's left up to the reader.

    Ch 7 A Turning Point In Our Lives.
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    The Sleepwalker
    Urban · LanumKing
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Posted

    Pretty good novel I really liked it. Mabye not the starting since it kinda throughs you off but the fight scene and the build up the writer created really impressed me. I hope he keeps writing and eventually gets a contract.

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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Commented

    bro she was his husband and didnt know that?? idk why but the author seemed to feel sorry for this lady if i was the writer she would have died in this chapter and if i felt like it her children would go down with her.

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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Commented

    tf is this????

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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Posted

    I liked the introduction, but it could use some work. For instance, the exposition could be toned down a bit in addition to the description and then there's the description of the characters that could be tonned down also other than that its a great novel.

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    Ruler's Conquest
    Fantasy · isyon
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Replied to TheWriter117

    yea😂

    Ch 3 Was That The Sleepwalker?
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    The Sleepwalker
    Urban · LanumKing
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Replied to Mrfekry

    thanks

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    The Sleepwalker
    Urban · LanumKing
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Posted

    So the opening was a bit slow but the overall atmosphere that the writer creating is interesting and he determined the plot right in chapter 2 which was good. And i love how the sub plot isn't rushed but instead takes its time ti built up i hope the story keep bring in new interesting things!

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    Traces Of The Heart
    Urban · Lua_C
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Commented

    lame

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    Traces Of The Heart
    Urban · Lua_C
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Commented

    us men are so simple one freaking smile caused all of this

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    Traces Of The Heart
    Urban · Lua_C
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Commented

    was walking home

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    Traces Of The Heart
    Urban · Lua_C
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Commented

    walked

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    Traces Of The Heart
    Urban · Lua_C
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Commented

    not a bad start i liked the ending somewhat hopefully we get more on jin and reum

    Ch 1 The Grimace
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    Traces Of The Heart
    Urban · Lua_C
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  • LanumKing
    LanumKing6mth
    Posted

    this was a well written and well planned novel. the pacing was good the scene were explained and designed excellently. I personally think that Ethan's character is a bit generic which i aint to find of but it's find hopefully this show follows the kill off a character dynamic and does depend on dead wait to hold it back.

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    Mission: Impossible - Uprising
    Movies · TheWriter117
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