Kefy0

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yaped a bit. wrote this on phone, that is why the spacing is shit.

okay i don't know, some say that the romance is to slow, but i think it wayyyyy to fast. i have read up 10th chapter writings dis btw. i also think the romance is forced quite the bit accualy. i don't like the "mate bond" concept, it's fine if only its like, he can feel it and stuff. but its affecting him like crazy. there are also inconsistency with stuff like how he got a car. and gaining a whole identity is way harder to get, than just brainwashing few people. would be better to write the first 10 chapters on how he familiarizes him self in the new world and makes do with the situation. and then ofc the characters, npc's and relationships. only person he had a dialog was Jesica 'i think' and even that felt forced. Yea and the "mate bond" always makes him feel like hes suffering 'ik in ch10 it's almost gone', and that just shatters any dialog with other characters. 1. The romance started way to fast and is moving way too fast 'imo' . 2. The situations he get in to are skiped, like they don't even matther. 'i would like to read, how he manages to get his identity documents, even if he needs to inffluence people'. 3. Starting school is retarded, when you have nothing to your name. And bro has a car but no drivers licance. This feels like one of thoes wish fulfillment story's and if that's the case then everything makes sense.

where did bro get a car and a house?? you are forcing the romance bit too much.

if leveling one skill to the max takes like 5-6 years. he gona be world champ of boxing by the age of 22 and he dosent even have to max the skill to 100, if 75 is pro lvl, then grining it to 90 would still make him unbeatable. would be better to have other intrests. like being the chess champion and idk pro gamer. Ik science, tehnology etc. is boring, but creating cure for all illnesse and saving milions, will make anyone happy.

W chapter, i am top 15, in fan ranking btw. that makes me superior to almost all of you.

fuck school i guess

feels like rage bait, these last few ch...

just go to kamar taj and get op

okayyyy damm author, chil