World_System

I am increasingly convinced that the author does not understand how the world and magecraft in Fate actually work. In the Age of Gods, Mystery was not hidden from ordinary people—not because humanity was small in number, but because it was true Magic itself. In the Age of Man, magi are left only with magecraft, and it is extremely dependent on secrecy. Even such a level of exposure would drastically weaken magi. And all of this happens for no real reason, because magi fundamentally do not care about humanity at all. Humanity could go completely extinct if it interferes with the process of reaching the Akasha.

The idea may sound interesting, but it is functionally impossible in the Age of Humans. The only thing that could cause a scenario of the same scale would be to follow a similar path from Notes. But this is the same in scale, but specifically, it could not cause ANYTHING. Unless we completely break the logic of the Fate universe, but then this fanfic has about zero value.

The author himself understands that he wrote poorly, but does not want to delete it for reasons unknown to me. I suppose it is writer's pride, although I cannot imagine why a novice and clearly unskilled author would have any. Furthermore, my experience tells me that the author originally wanted to write the story that follows chapter 31, but due to his limited skills, he was forced to write this 31-page exposition, as he did not have enough skills to place it in the plot after entering the academy.

I'm really curious, has the author ever seen real martial arts, with or without weapons? Not a ‘karate board-breaking tournament,’ but when the goal is to actually beat up your opponent? Even just a street fight? The very idea of ‘sword dancing’ as a fighting style sounds so absurd that even the Jedi didn't allow themselves to do such a thing, and they are the ones who see the future. No one will even let you move your sword from its position. If you cover even a small angle for defence while moving, when you are ‘gracefully and smoothly moving your sword’, you will immediately be hit in that unprotected area. The only thing you can achieve with ‘choreography in combat’ is your own death. The only way to make it work is to give yourself a conceptual advantage in combat, like the Primate Murder, then it doesn't matter what you fight with or how, even if it's a fork and a spoon.

And the work has just died ( The idea had great potential, it's a pity it was wasted.

I like moments when I can literally quote the author to devalue part of his own story) ‘People get used to EVERYTHING,’ it's just a matter of time. (The second part is from me.)

With each chapter, it gets worse and worse, and the interesting story of ‘an apathetic character being forced into heroism’ turns into a dull ‘an apathetic person becoming a dull hero.’ And also, if I'm writing a comment anyway, you refer to the fandomness of Fate here. So, do you know the Counter-Guards? And what are all reasonable people willing to do to avoid becoming like that? Even hell is better than the Counter-Guards.

Writing and distributing this chapter should be punished more severely than distributing drugs. The entire fan fiction is simply disrespectful to the original characters and ideas.

I can understand why others talk about an ‘interesting idea,’ but what I don't understand is why no one talks about the ‘boring implementation.’ The system? It looks like the author wanted to include a ‘friend of an idiot’ but didn't want to insert a real character who would take up time. These ‘crossover battles’ look like ‘vsbattles,’ and I can't remember how long ago this concept became boring. Because in fact, no matter how you sugarcoat it, what we get is a 100% analogue of the children's game ‘I invented a sword that cuts through everything. And I invented an absolute shield,’ and it's UNBELIEVABLE how boring it is.

Let me clarify that we are talking about a character who created the very concept of HERO and KING. Gilgamesh did not receive the status of King of Heroes for no reason. And, importantly, he did not relinquish his magical-conceptual status as king (or rather, Gilgamesh's status, because in Fate, the concept of “king” appeared to describe Gilgamesh's behavior). This also affects the Gate of Babylon, because from a conceptual point of view, nothing has changed: he is king and he possesses all human riches (and some divine ones, but that's a long story). And let's not forget that Gil's strongest ability is that he is OMNISCIENT. Literally, at every moment in time, he knows EVERYTHING. And he CONSCIOUSLY refused to accept this information (he did not turn off the ability, only the mental effort) in order to be more like a human being. He decided that it was impossible to rule people while being so distant from them on a mental level. Oh, right, I forgot, he also marked the beginning of the end of the “age of gods” and the beginning of the “age of humans.” I think this is more than impressive, and it takes his behavior out of the category of “arrogance” and into the category of “pride.”