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Yalatola

Yalatola

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To write a great story we need to live them

2023-06-02 JoinedNigeria
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola2d
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    Use this as a Q&A section. Some indications of what to expect: OP MC: yes, but with proper growth, so he won't be God in 2 chapters. Smart MC: Yes, as the synopsis said, he knows what will happen and when and he will use it. Beta mind(passive, gets insulted): no Harem: no More questions? The scene is yours.

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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola5d
    Commented

    Dora 11 years old

    Ch 8 Evolution
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola10d
    Replied to Trevor_Anderson_6429

    bet

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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola10d
    Replied to Trevor_Anderson_6429

    many things happens in the shadow

    "You shouldn't underestimate the abnormal nature of a true Avatar."
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola11d
    Replied to Trevor_Anderson_6429

    everyone can be hated until you know them well

    Ch 4 The Heroine and the Genius
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola14d
    Replied to DaoistOfSupremacy

    The characters know each other already so they don't need to explain everything but i admit that it was a bad idea for readers. I suggest you check the technical sheets, most of the world building is there for new readers and I can answer if you have more questions

    "... I'll tell Mr. Albert that you keep calling him my mother."
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola14d
    Replied to Chaos_lord_

    The rest is too long to detail and probably pointless now, but I'll follow directly with the second phase in a few days, hopefully 10 chapters before Monday. The new book will show you more what I tried to do here and the lore, and it will correct the mistakes I made before in many ways. hope to see you there too and make something that you will appreciate

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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola14d
    Replied to Chaos_lord_

    i understand, the point you mentioned are correct, the point of the betrayal was that the one in control wasn't Dora but the sin, so erasing his memory the first time was wise, as for the second it was planned but when the mother will come this Dora would refuse. The story from this point will never be back to them together, the idea was that they would use him and he would awake in two side, one who would learn yo be the true Dora in a parallel world and the second who would turn against everyone after chapter 183 and everyone he killed would be revive in a sort of heaven where the good Dora is with Midgard and Elizabeth (reverberating to the evil Dora in making him believe that if he kill everyone he will save the world)

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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola14d
    Replied to 0Klein_amon0

    thank you, you can read it whenever you feel like it and have another opinion. just warning you that it won't be a sweet delightful walk in the park, it's made to be very dark until one specific chapter and it's the biggest downside I'm facing with feedback. this book is the phase 1 of another book but now that i'm aware of this problem I'm I'm currently working on phase 2 first so really take your time.

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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola15d
    Replied to Chaos_lord_

    thank you for your review, your experience through this story made me realize that my approach was problematic for what I was planning. the true plot of the book was for the mc to find who he really is, the thing about a true Dora and it begins from chapter 183 but I have to admit that it's probably too long. indeed the mc is meant to be antagonizing and turn against everyone while his true self will discover who he was and help everyone to stop him. I have no trouble spoiling it now because now i understand my flaws, the story is too complicated, thank you for making me understand that.

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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola16d
    Replied to Chaos_lord_

    This is really troubling because I understand what you want and I confirm you that it will happen, but there is something I'm planning to do so the MC had to be that way for now. If you mean that you feel like dropping but you still want to give it a try, I can tell you more about what's coming, there's a beginning of something in chapter 183. But if you want to trust me, just handle it a little longer. It has to be painful so you'll really appreciate when it will be rewarding

    Ch 169 Final: A Tale Of Two Doras
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola16d
    Replied to Chaos_lord_

    Hero without friendship power and Deus ex machina with a monster alter ego? He is nothing compared to what he would be when... Just remember his mother words about if he gets serious in chapter 6. You're close to something.

    Ch 137 The Sky Brings Wisdom, And Problems
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola16d
    Replied to TheGodlyFateFox

    still archaic

    "Oh? she didn't say to thou? I be surprised, considering thou art her brother, Hope, yet 'tis true. A few years since, I got thy sister to join when she was merely E-rank, and today she is doing the like. Is not this a form of cycle? 'tis like I be receiving mine grandchildren, fufu"
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola16d
    Replied to TheGodlyFateFox

    archaic english, ancien language

    "Welcome to Nebula Academy, the court of guard of the Kingdom's future meetest emissaries. Mine name is Candace Elysium, and from now on, I shall also be thy dean."
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola16d
    Replied to Chaos_lord_

    you don't want to be spoiled after going that far right?

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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola16d
    Replied to Chaos_lord_

    friendship power doesn't exist here, only monsters can dominate

    Ch 103 The One That Monsters Fear
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola17d
    Replied to CreatorOfTheVoid

    Everything has a purpose, even self harm... just remember that: DONTREADTHECOMMENTS.DONTREADTHECOMMENTS.

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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola18d
    Replied to Viscerated

    he doesn't know it yet

    "Those country folk patting themselves on the back… You know they used a magic meter to check his energy, right? That means what we saw was its full potential, hit it somewhere in your head.
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola18d
    Replied to Viscerated

    mana cost, flower abilities are weaker than poison dart, before his level up his stats are maxed out so he is using weak skills with the maximum capacity of his body at the moment, after breakthrough the skills are more pricey. use hero time as a sort of example

    |Mana:55
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  • Yalatola
    Yalatola18d
    Replied to Viscerated

    not a pain to deal with when you take 1 second to understand what's happening , you're the reader you're supposed to discover a new story not revisiting a menu

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