Xan_cory

Its a Shame that you the problems, but i dont think you should give up you have frost as an antagonist and later hit. lets not forget the original plat that you could pull since the main story is in the twin universe. you could like a said a frost arc, a hit arc where they flee or somthing, you could make an arc where they trevel to universe 7 ton help in one of the arcs there and lern about the super saiyajin god (could make somthing up there) there should also be beings like buu or a version of moro in universe 6 that you could write about. but if you decite to drop it its unterstandeble since its hart to write a original story whit OCs. nice work thou [img=recommend]

Thats ok they have a Powerlevel thats about base frieza level in the namek arc (if i rfemember right could be 250k or 500k pretty sure its 500 but could be wrong and nobody relly stopt his conquest.) after a fiew chapter a reaction from vados; champa and the kais would be niced like they notes the small improvment and want to follow it wiht ther viewing skills ( cystal ball and vados staff)

I really like the family dynamic you have started, but i advise caution if you change to much, you have too change the character behavior later on, because children that age are impressionable and they build a lot of thier persionallyti early. the eevee situation i dont know about because persionly i dont like to much chance in pokemon. like will it be somting to broken. since you interduced mewto dna a psydo legandary espion for example shoud be fine. but keep up the good work its a good read[img=recommend]

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I like the Story it´s a pleasend read hope you contiue the updates / Translation, and how long is the Original ?

You can break canon as you now its when ais black wind god revealt later in the story ( which is her skill avenger and magic syncroning ) it good be a good moment for bonding and besinds you could find mabey a prallel/ lessons from zard and alfia ( a swordsman who uses magic and a mage) since they wantet to create new heros

Watch the Grand clash event of astrea recourd on youtube they help a lot and are free. please countiue with the good job :)

capter 24 sorry ^^

Story so far is good Iam at Chapter 25 and so far its been enyoable, i hope thge wirter countius the story for long time, because it has a lot of potential.

I just finish reading what is updatet so for an I really liked it the Mc is Strong but not to Op and for me His Stats are not to much like in other fanfics and the Oc are good too. Of course you can always improve on the Character development but so far good job and i hope the story continues soon :)