To be honest it’s a good story, but the way the MC is, he doesn’t feel like an endless/abstract. At the start he has the pride of one, but as the story goes on, he seems weak. He’s also getting tricked but a SHIELD agent. It just doesn’t make sense. Other than that it’s good.

Same it really integrates them, as well as building a type of plot for them.

Yeah the whole thing is centered around women, no men, he has no male friends, just surrounded by women, it makes it unrealistic. I prefer his other fan fic. It has more depth and more versatility.

Bro, thank you for putting these up, they help a lot.

I don’t get it, why add someone completely unrelated to the supernatural or superhuman world. It just seems forced tbh.

I have the exact same problem. It’s too confusing, like everything is all over the place.

Is this going to follow mcu timeline or will it follow the comics? I’d prefer the comics to be honest, there have been way too many mcu fan fics

Oh, the name is misleading, what fic is it? Or is it an original novel?

To be honest, this story was alright l, it wasn’t that good. However the major problem I have with this book is the dialogue. The dialogue between characters is way too unrealistic. No body talks like that. That’s the major problem, I couldn’t even get used to it. Ultimately after around 50 chapters I dropped. Author next time try to make the dialogue less fancy and more how you would talk to another person.

Is this an orv fic?

I’m loving this

What’s inspired inventor?

Interesting concept, looking forward to it. I say instead of doing 1 chapter at a time, you should mass release it till like chapter 20 then you can take your time. It will attract more readers

The book is good, I like where this story is going. However I have one minor problem. The dialogue is abit stiff and way too formal between characters. That’s the only problem I have with it’s if you could change that then the story would be getting 5 stars through and through. Overall 4/5.

It’s an ancient relic now even. Who uses a psp these days.

Is there another one? Just so that I may get inspiration.

No, but I swear Martians are able to use fire attacks, but they are scared of fire, right?

That’s why I’m still thinking of whether to add the Sefirah castle or not. Is there a spirit world or astral plane in DC?

Hmmm, you’ve given me a lot to think about. I will take your idea into consideration.

The MC is a Great Old One, he is an Outer God. He will be able to survive until the end.