It’s a great premis and idea but the pacing of the story is erratic and seemes unplanned at moments leading to the skipping of story points that could enhance and extend the length of the story. The wrighter gets the characters genders mixed at points which leads to confusion for the reader. I feel that the wrighter hasn’t planed the story to it’s fullest. They seem to have a complete idea but haven’t planed the story out around it. Would be better if a wrighting pipeline was used for an efficient and comprehensive story Keep it up and continue writing to improve your craft👍🏼