Victoria_444

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Hands together for you, author! This work is amazing ! Thank you for this beautiful story !

A nice start, I must say but please fix the errors. looking forward to more!!

exactly!! I also can't breathe here

beautiful love of a brother

oh, no! I don't see a quotation, girl! fix it please

but she should have at least accepted her grandma's gesture before asking questions

ran to the car. isn't she old to like ...run

when is being repetitive. Try breaking the sentence

uh-huh