who is Simon?

??? who said this

Wrong dialouge format

This phrase is hard to read, to be honest. Poor language

people have already known that's him

Don't need to repeat Jacob three times in this phrase

It feels unnatural and distracting.

You overused this function: "noun of noun." Jacob of... Flood of monsters Theatre of death

This scene could have dialogue.

you have already mentioned Jacob order his army

And why do you switch to the simple present tense? Keep the tense consistent throughout the story.

this phrase is hard to read.

Same with this guy.

Introduce Venom to readers; what does he look like? Age? Name? And his role in the story. Besides, when he added, what does his face look like? What does his posture look like?