Kevin_007
I'm a minion..living on my minion island and Along with my lots of buddies...I would like to read from the author of my standard ...*Aahmmm I love banana..đđđ
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Kevin_0077mthReplied to Zhoa_FeiYes..
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Okay..thanks for enlightening me..from that fact
I began looking inside myself for the words necessary to ask them about it. The language they spoke, I likely heard something similar to before. Not exactly the same, but their bickering triggered something in my memory. - Kevin_00711mthCommented"But it's just ONE NIGHT... You can forget it like a fever dream and move on to the next day. I'll continue hating you, and you can continue running away from the Underworld. It's not like I'm asking you to marry me or anything. Consider that I'm trying to do a favour for you... You may not live to see the next day. So, why just not use me, and lose your 'V' card?"
- Kevin_00711mthCommented
That one you don't even let us read..đđ
A/N - The chapter went through a rewrite. (23/6/2023) - Kevin_00711mthCommented[PRESENT - YOHAN's DUEL]
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Roach ...mean cockroach
"I won't take it, Diana... It must be like I FORCED HIM TO GIVE UP. LANCE ROACH beat the shit out of his girl's fiance and FORCED HIM TO LEAVE!" - Kevin_0071yrCommented
*Rosebud lips *melted the heart of whoever came across her
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Okay that sentence is perfect and beautifully written..good job here
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If it a Witch. Then the male version of the Witch is Wizard If only talking about the pure blood.. Then better use. Run in bloodline ...or something be clear about it
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*with an umbrella in my hand and it protacting me
The rain was pouring down as I walked into the pack with my umbrella protecting me from the rain. There was barely any person since it was almost dark. - Kevin_0071yrCommented
This show his utterly mean character. She is a chile and lost a parent and ignore by a parent too So in that case the situation made her orphan
I didn't give it much thought yet I had lost a wife and she had lost a parent. I was hurting so was she. - Kevin_0071yrCommented
If a son looked like his father.. Better to use *resemble
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My hands were shaking performing the action English is a simple language author..better keep it this way. But it has some rules..every word belongs to a special place and keep it there You can't used words here and there they will change the meaning ...thring to understand how it work.... Hope you get my point.. All the best for future ..I know you will learn that....
I knelt before a freshly dug grave, its marker still blank. I reached out and started to trace my fingers along the edge of the grave, trembling as I did so. - Kevin_0071yrCommented
* Whom she left in my care. If he is talking for his daughter
I slowly rose to my feet and bowed my head, determined to carry on despite the pain and emptiness I felt knowing that I had to be strong for those who were still with me. - Kevin_0071yrCommented
I tiredly stand on my feet while lowering my head Bowing can't be used..because she is her wife not any higher body
I slowly rose to my feet and bowed my head, determined to carry on despite the pain and emptiness I felt knowing that I had to be strong for those who were still with me. - Kevin_0071yrCommented
*freasly build grave.. because the person is already buried
I knelt before a freshly dug grave, its marker still blank. I reached out and started to trace my fingers along the edge of the grave, trembling as I did so. - Kevin_0071yrCommented
I *solely Independently..sound like a office term..its too formal
I independently stood in the middle of a worn-down cemetery, my clothes tattered and my eyes filled with sorrow.