This story has potential to be really good, but I think it's heavily held back by pacing issues and inconsistencies. Furthermore, any consequences for Jase are mostly disregarded, not at all impacting his actions. Chapter 7 was the worst offender, having Jase shrug off crashing into an alley wall and effectively falling off a flat. It's a miracle he even got home alive that night. That being said, previous criticisms were responded to well, so I have high hopes for the future!