DaoistKushMountain

bro, I hopped off on chapter 3 after reading some inconsistencies where within sentences of each other he needs a way to get out of the draft, he gets such way, he doesn't want to use it because if it's found out he'll experience something worse? (as in dude literally asked for a way out and got it and out of nowhere its the worst thing that could happen with no prior mention as to why besides they'll do a lot worse than forced conscription) and then he explains why he shouldn't use it( it might leave traces) and then he says well its not like I've left yet and uses it. If the Author can't clearly drive the plot, that's an issue, if he is unsure of how to move the story, it should be the MCs inner monolog that shows the indecision. instead we get his writing all over the place with word vomit of baseless assumptions as filler, and then MCs decisive actions completely separated from the Authors weak drive of the story. from the other reviews I've seen, MC starts acting as indecisive as the writing, and everyone else says the best thing about this story is the world and concept. What made me drop seems to be a constant from your review,so I'll step off here.

I'm with you, MC is clearly asking for a way to avoid conscription, gets it, worries for half the chapter that he'll now be a forced lab rat and that it isn't the time to test it out, and then without anything happening within a few sentences of each other suddenly the best moment to jump in is NOW.

so you just contradicted the last sentences, just toss a few sentences as word filler, huh. this ain't even an internal monologue to see MCs thoughts all over the place, this is just the author not knowing how to drive the plot.

at this point he is directly making assumptions, isn't humanity hell bent on evolution and expansion. Someone with a special attribute like him would surely classify above 1st citizen.

why would it be leaked when you can just let it be known ahead of time to the OMNIPRESENT IMPARTIAL godess of wisdom in charge of humans, that's a chance at finding a different evolution path and a way to avoid conscription. if you're going to have the mc act like he has something to hide when he finds something good, you shouldn't have made him desperate to find anything good as a ways the only means to escape his current problem. a contradiction of MCs nature before he even faces his first hardship does not bode well for a long series.

what does green smoke means?

I'm barely 30? chapters in but this dude not only inflates the story with irrelevant chatter of side characters but the mc will go on tangents that go nowhere about the same chatter. And then a chapter later you will get what you were actually were supposed to learn from that chatter with MC correcting his thoughts knowing that what was said earlier was misinterpreted a d then you have his friends chiming in calling him dumb for thinking it was how he first thought it was, and then he breaks it down with modern science and it turns out it wasn't science it's just how this world works. This is a first for me, I just stopped halfway through a chapter and just thought that I don't want to read this. 2000+ chapters of filler words. Usually when plot goes out the window I start skimming and the drop, with this I didn't even get to skimming. You have characters with zero educational background going toe to toe with this worlds top nobility and they somehow are able to carry the argument. The characters don't feel unique, it just feels like the author is narrating the story because all the characters talk the same way, as in they all sound like they are defending the sport thesis MC wrote about martial arts in this world. If you make a roast and the ends are burnt but the center is good, you rate the whole roast not just the center, and this story is made in such a way that I can't even dig into just the center by skimming it, because he made sure to vomit enough words over it that it's impossible to skim.

if you skipped most of the novel to get to the good parts, then that rating doesn't belong there. if it's a 3 rate it 3. If you make a roast and the ends are burnt but the center is good, the whole roast doesn't get 5 starts just because a piece was good.

this review should be higher. I feel this. I'm barely 30? chapters in, but this dude not only inflates the story with irrelevant chatter of side characters, but the mc will go on tangents that go nowhere about the same chatter. And then a chapter later you will get what you were actually were supposed to learn from that chatter with MC correcting his thoughts knowing that what was said earlier was misinterpreted and then you have his friends chiming in calling him dumb for thinking it was how he first thought it was, and then he breaks it down with modern science and it turns out it wasn't science it's just how this world works. This is a first for me, I just stopped halfway through a chapter and just thought, "I don't want to read this." 2000+ chapters of filler words!? Usually, when plot goes out the window, I start skimming and then drop. With this, I didn't even get to the skimming.

I wonder how far from Kevin bacon that dude is.