Slow_Neptune

Very tense and exciting chapter.

Interesting mystery you have setup

It's intresting getting insight into the politics of the Xingyuu empire.

I like that you're taking the time to show these characters processing the situation they're in.

There is a minor grammatical error in this paragraph. I would suggest inserting "an" into the phrase "wearing emerald green dress" so it reads "wearing an emerald green dress"

I really liked the introduction of Linshi, Xiuying, and Ming. You really nailed the descriptions and atmosphere during the scene of those three on the fortress wall.

Huangfu is ruthless. This is an interesting turn of events

These are my honest opinions of this chapter. Your writing is not bad but the way your telling your story leaves more to be desired. You tell the events to the reader instead of showing them to the reader. A lot happened in this chapter but at the same time, I feel like very little happened. For example instead of telling the reader that Lily told her story and explained the world have Lily actually speak. I want to hear her story and explanations. Instead of telling your reader that Alex emerged victorious describe his battles. It's much more rewarding for the reader to see the MC emerge victorious once they know how hard the MC fought in the battle. Also as you write more of your story think about what makes your story unique. I've seen a lot of stories of MCs getting reincarnated in a fantasy, but what makes yours stand out?

I think it may be better to rephrase the last sentence. Instead of "the atmosphere crackled with freshly cut grass scent" you could say "the atmosphere crackled with the scent of freshly cut grass." I think this could make it clearer for your readers.

The setup of this story is spectacular, leaving room for the reader to enjoy the protagonist, Alexis, growth. The author takes their time in setting up the characters and situations they find themselves in. Some of the writing could be revised for increased clarity but overall the author expresses the characters' emotions really well.