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See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

I think that the story development is very good, and also, the character design, keep up the good work

The storyline and development are good and the world background too is good and I think this story is going to turn out to be great but the major problem is the update rate

The storyline is interesting but your writing skill still needs a lot of work.

I'm impressed the number of mistakes have reduced but I still found one or two that were wrong.

5he story line is good but I'm starting to notice more spelling errors.

why did claven call him Jack while his name is Jake?

based on what I've read this novel is going to turn out great.