corey_craig_2606

Couldn't really get past 30 chapters. The first handful of chapters showed promise but after that things slowly went downhill until i just stopped reading. The story is readable for many i guess but for me, there is to many small cringe moments and unnecessary antagonistic moments/people that aren't believable.

I love stories about hollywood but this story had me head-shaking way to many times in just a few chapters. Your grammar, word choice and sentence structure is all over the place. So many sentences don't even make sense and other sentences sound like a five year old wrote it due to its bad word choice. Maybe you get better and if that is the case, rewriting and editing would bring in more readers.

put, not kept.