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By the way, I was thinking about this chapter, why doesn’t he ask anyone if he’s heard anything about Hitogami? It made particular sense to ask Randolph if he knew who it was, since he had directed him to him. And he would have told him about it.

the problem is that everything is written extremely poorly here, the grammar is terrible, after editing it becomes readable, but before that... even a translator from Chinese to English would have produced something more understandable..

um, and like no one gives a shit that he got a D rank in the previous city?

The beginning is quite intriguing, although the description is very abstract and does not really encourage reading, the translation is good, the fanfic has potential, and I hope that the story will only get better as it processing

I would recommend you change the fic description, add how and why he ended up in Azkaban, because the current one is somehow not inspiring

I like harem stories, but good stories where the harem is not the main character's goal and he does not collect girls like pokemons.. I agree that the quality has dropped now, as if the authors are specifically writing (or even using a neural network) for horny teenagers.. From the HP fandom, I used to like A Magical Journey and Rise of the Protector

lol, skill tentacles are open XD

Well, the cliche about writing books at the age of 5 is too much

the beginning is of course a cliche, but a good cliche is better than a bad ad-lib to stand out, let's see what happens next, well and it's good that there is no system, they've already frankly become annoying

what with 400...