Unknown_The_Author
I'm just a humble author that writes for the sake of it. Anime, manga, manhwa, novels, I dig all of them. My works are mostly psychological, meant to slowly break their target... Anyway I hope you enjoy my stuff!
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A great start, I would recommend ironing out your tenses. All and all the novel is a great read.
Great build up, it feels weird having this paragraph when you mentioned his mom's death. Maybe end the chap by mentioning that his mom died.
The sequence of events with the bag were a bit confusing, and the chapter feel short. You could gradually increase them.
Unknown here, great start, I feel like writing in past tense is something you could look into.
I knew it looked familiar!!! Nah it's not, you improvised upon it but the resemblance is kinda canny. I say role with it, looks mad hype and bold, grabbing reader's attention.
Absolutely a great story. The diction is next level and the plot gradually broadens. A story I would well recommend.
It's pretty good, next level diction I must say. It's funny how the cover kinda looks like i became the pope so what.
Thanks for your thoughts on the story. As far as what happens to the characters, you have to read further to find out.
Oh, don't mind me, just shamelessly reviewing my work. It's pretty good, you should try it out.