XxSpideyxX

Im not sure your story is served by turning Vijay into an action hero this late into the development.

Standing near artillery is not good for your health. it came out that huge amounts of the us army suffered long term debilatating health issues from being near artillery too often. Nothing you can do about regular soldiers developing these issues but should try to avoid the Emperor developing issues from being near such heavy cannons.

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title caught my eye. does that mean the mc is meta aware and can understand cliche. will he make fun of it or will this be straight edgelord?

is this a progression fantasy? is it kingdom or empire building? what is the plot or point? is it just some kids in a prehistoric fantasy setting? the summary is not clear. is this about action and fighting? or is it about using modern knowledge in a prehistoric fantasy setting? is the mc smart, cunning, or stupid regular person? is this magic powers solve everything or a normal skilled person counqering through cunning?

this dude is a man-child, but he's in the body of a little boy, so I guess that fits.

it would at the very least bring up an interesting idea of what the ancient one thinks of places like asgard and the tree and norse mythology. her view on the organziations of power and their place in the universe would be the best place to start mapping out the political landscape of the universe, the strength of its nations, and the borders. but that might not be fun to write for most authors. it would be fun to read for me, though. anything to put kids' universes through an adult perspective is fun for me.

I agree with you. story pacing is more important. but at first glance it seems like the justifications for the pacing are low effort. make up something to slow progress because the author already wrote his character as op. walking it back now just seems random. make magic more complicated or use complications with his soul as justification. just put more effort than a line saying infinite processing power cant crack magic. ita hard for a logical brain to swallow that reasoning without intterupting the enjoyment of the story.

is he a mutant? hows is science and chemicals giving him lizard telepathy? feels a little dumb and contrived.

pace is good, great even, only mad there isnt enough chapters to feed me