Bryte_Won

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Thanks for the review!

Thanks for the review!

The writing quality is rather good with very few and only minor mistakes. The update stability is rather good with consistent updates. The story has a very good premise and development, with only minor problems cropping up around the character design and world background. The characters have no explanation so everything they do is a new surprise while the world background is too heavily reliant upon the readers having previous knowledge. Overall this is very good for a beginner writer who is writing a fanfic, but it could use some improvement if the author plans to switch over to writing original stories.

Author's Thoughts: This story is my first serious attempt at writing, I hope to provide a sound world background with a cohesive system of power; furthermore, I plan for the stability of updates to be rather good with some leeway for lapses of a couple days. I hope to provide an interesting premise along the lines of an intergalactic world, to truly flesh out how each race interacts with one another and give sound reasoning for any reasons behind a races dislike for another. I've read other stories with similar premise, my main complaint about them was always world-building as well as character development, two areas I hope to do far better in. But most of all, I hope to create an enjoyable story with a cohesive plotline for readers on this site to enjoy!

The story is well written with very few mistakes, and only in grammar. The update stability has seemingly gotten far better in the past four days, but appeared to be a bit slow before then. The story development and world background are spectacular, even when recently introduced to a character one can already get a feel for their personality; and the writing shows a superb designing of the world system, showing off the fickleness of life and death thoroughly throughout the first chapter even through it's shortness.

Thanks for the review, the reason for the wordiness of the beginning chapters is to thoroughly flesh out the characters and world building, later chapters should begin to cut back on this as you're not constantly introduced to new concepts. If you see any spelling errors please leave a comment on the paragraph so I can correct them!

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