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This won’t go far. I’ll tell you exactly what I told another author: too much AI. You seem to be a beginner. Yes, you have another book, but that one also relies heavily on AI. Stories that scream “I used AI” in every chapter don’t succeed. Not because they’re necessarily bad, but because they feel extremely robotic, and you can spot it from a mile away. Reduce the use of AI, or at least use it more carefully and deliberately.

Not gonna lie, this is good and definitely worth your time. Since it’s your first novel, some scenes don’t hit as hard as you probably intended, but you still did a great job making them immersive. For a first novel, that’s genuinely impressive! The pacing feels balanced. The main character isn’t overpowered or weak. He sits somewhere in between, leaning more toward strong in my opinion. Some things felt a bit rushed [Minor spoilers ahead!!] especially his realization about his altered memories. That moment could have had more impact if it had been built up with more hints beforehand. Still, it was handled reasonably well. I’m not sure how long you plan the story to be, but introducing a mysterious being who starts pulling the strings this early did not fully work for me. With 100 chapters already out, it might not have been the best timing, depending on your long term plan. One suggestion: Try to really develop the characters during the Ancient Earth arc. They still feel somewhat one dimensional. This is a good opportunity to flesh them out and give readers something deeper. Overall, good work! Keep going!

Thank you. Based on the synopsis, it was exactly what it seemed to be. I recommend adding a few hashtags to the synopsis so readers have a better idea of what to expect. Also, give your own story a five-star rating! It is practically a tradition bro!! You can use that rating section as a Q&A as well, if you are willing. Health to your hands, author.

Clearly written with AI. A classic mistake by beginner authors these days. You wanted to improve your writing, your descriptions, your dialogue, and so on, so you thought it would be a good idea to use ChatGPT or some other AI to help. But here’s the problem: you let the AI erase your humanity from the writing. Nothing in the chapters feels remotely human, not even the descriptions of the settings. The AI heavily rewrote the entire chapter and made it overly robotic. Don’t do that again. You have a good concept here. Get organized and rewrite it using your own words. AI kills your story before it even begins.

Harém? ........................................................................................................................................................................

Classic. The protagonist doesn't see or feel anything wrong with his cultivation or base, but for some reason, he decides to "consolidate his base" for a few months before continuing cultivation. Oh, cliché.

This guy easily makes my top ten worst protagonists I've read this month, very easily. I'll only force myself to keep reading because of his ability, because seriously, it's very forced.

The synopsis screams at you, “Hey, I’m OP! Come on!” You arrive and this is what you get: nerf, nerf, nerf and, oh, I almost forgot... Nerf again!

You're mentally ill, buddy, get help and stop begging almost every author of every novel I've recently opened to add your fetishes to their stories

A classic, a breath of fresh air! This screams classic Xianxia. I enjoyed reading this so much that it briefly reminded me of my younger self from years ago who had just started reading novels and LOVED cultivation. I liked the main character, the way the events unfolded, the impeccable and engaging writing style, the protagonist's little trick, the pacing... It was everything I needed and more. I'm looking forward to the next chapters. Keep it up, author!