Eben_Kotze_6644

to be honest i hate this writing style are they trying to sound smart deep or mysterious it's just a shitty writing style for example (over explaining every simple action to short dialogue )or the plain word filler (he didn't fart he shat or he didn't look he stared) and the word different is over used (you don't shout you listen that's the difference) reading a story with this type of writing is painful and it's sad that its a common style a lot of cool concepts ruined because of it

it is not bad but he needs to find a balance between philosophy and story.if a story only has philosophy it's not a story it is a diary of ideals and instead of pulling you in and imagining yourself in the characters shoes you only think that is the 100th time i haver herd (that's the difference) and that makes the fic repetitive it would do better as a short story

why do they always mention the original name.he and him will be just fine.the og name comes up at least once every paragraph