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I was fine with just Leah and Rosalie but the way you write these scenes makes me want Bella in the relationship too.
I have a lot of ff i'm reading at once and this one doesn't update everyday so its not at the top of the list and easy to forget and i was talking about the people he hasn't met yet.
Are you going to make every woman he's with get spider powers?
The absolute most annoying thing Naruto did i'm glad they made him stop saying it in the anime
This just makes the entire romance feel empty. There was no prelude or build up to it and no dialogue. If there is no emotion behind the interaction between characters it makes them feel like they don't matter especially since the Mc has been talking about being in love with all of these characters and then losing them all, over and over again. I hope you don't do to Jane, Tali, and Liara what you did here.
What does it look like
Thats lame, its the multiverse anybody could get with anybody, relationships especially the ones in DC aren't set in stone.
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You cant just skip past all of this important stuff.
This looks absolutely atrocious. She looks inbred. Just use regular pics instead of Ai especially when its dollar store AI.
Is she talking in slow motion
You telling them what your powers are and how they work is more suspicious then saying you don't know.
Its definitely a little too forced. I feel like Hulk is too straightforward and confident to be that flustered and nervous.
Does Erin have parents?