meowish

that was.. unexpected, I thought of silver slippers. From my own meaning, silver slippers exudes weakness but rich and catching. Did you do a lil bit of research :) (I have yet to use my 1 fast pass and I'll do it here for Levon!!)

feels like wizard of oz reference, instead it is the shards that you need help leading to you-home

feels like that yellow brick road that leads to home

I grinded 2 weeks of that damn daily reward(I finally got free 24hours) :( I don't have any books to read, maybe I should find a good book

dang.. 2 years ago? how long did author neglect this great story idea. :(

though your idea is between good and bad, it's just the way you show it. (Sion uses thrust and kills bla bla) Author, You are like... just telling every action, add some mystery and spice down here

I don't see who is who? I saw () with names but are all of that talking to themselves or talking to people

For Dialogues, maintain quotation and this is kind of like... too much info, why are there numbers that explains it, don't pack yiur stuff too much.

Multiple paragraphs, no line breaks? it hurts my eye that I just skipped it.

looking at the names, hes probably a foreigner and settled in Philippines. same with "Samantha" and "Anna"