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ZayyTech

ZayyTech

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My imagination omnipotent, novels i read become life like, place myself into the story, a world of power i seek, to trample on annoying pest, the world of my imagination that novels hold, is enliven

2023-02-07 JoinedGlobal
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  • ZayyTech
    ZayyTech6 days ago
    Posted

    Tbh this is a high two stars but since i like the read it’s 3. Unfortunately author, this one thing you did in your writing makes this story unreadable and i’m dropping. I advise you rewrite all the chapters and future chapters because not knowing who is talking and you not implying it is a kindergarten mistake. Hard to read but still a good story.

  • ZayyTech
    ZayyTech13 days ago
    Commented

    bro author, are you into gay romance or something. every other sentence these two dudes mention each other. Get off midoriya’s dick. I’m here to see the mc not him

    This book has been deleted.
  • ZayyTech
    ZayyTech13 days ago
    Commented

    aye bruh, stop catering to midoriya and this whole hiding thing is annoying. I want to see the dominance that comes with thunder not dude acting like some hidden character

    This book has been deleted.
  • ZayyTech
    ZayyTech19 days ago
    Commented

    fucking brain dead author. no way you wrote or translated this, read it, then published it. WHO THE F*CK IS TALKING!!!!!!!? Use “ and [Shoto talking] or something. This is getting hard to read and if you fix this, this already good novel will become way better.

  • ZayyTech
    ZayyTech21 days ago
    Commented

    you need to do a better job on telling us who is talking. The”-“ is not really i good way is more fitting to use ” when speaking. Also when changing pov maybe do a line like [Shoto pov] blah blah blah [Mc pov] and so on. It helps make reading easier

  • ZayyTech
    ZayyTech23 days ago
    Commented

    like when is the next sign in

  • ZayyTech
    ZayyTech23 days ago
    Commented

    bruh her character is not important to the story at all. move on from her cause i’m here for the mc

  • ZayyTech
    ZayyTecha month ago
    Commented

    Story is going great and im really enjoying this novel. But if you make Mary join the group, i’ll still read but man it’ll be disappointing

  • ZayyTech
    ZayyTecha month ago
    Replied to Supreme_Dragon_God

    Tbh the Karmen rider and multiple spiders is what really confused me. If you can reduce spiders too two or make Yuri spider abilities more special then that could make the story easier to write and flow better(they seem to similar ngl). Karmen Rider always confused me and there’s to many of them so most don’t know their full power or too lazy to look up. It’s early in the story so maybe it can be exchanged for nanotech or high tech like a tron bike. The little drone can be bees controlled by an AI or the mind. These are just my thoughts and can use it or use as an reference. Good luck on the novel.

  • ZayyTech
    ZayyTecha month ago
    Replied to Supreme_Dragon_God

    no hate just like your stories and hope you don’t get complacent with your writing. Even then it’s just a few errors and everything else is highly enjoyable to read