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Kuroyasha101

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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
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    Nice one!

    Ch 22 Fateful Encounter on Bastoro Nat II
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    Demon of Nihility: Rise of Humanity
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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
    Commented

    Yea last chapters were pretty well written, keep it up!

    Ch 19 The Downside of Talent II
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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
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    The writing style got seriously improved. Author can still improve but just in the last 10 chapters it already shot up quite a lot. šŸ‘ŒKeep it up!

    Ch 14 Talent to kill for III
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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
    Commented

    And here I thought Alex would be the MC šŸ˜…

    Ch 8 Vizbourne III
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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
    Replied to Retrodevil

    No problem mate, keep up the good work!

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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
    Posted

    So as promised, here is my first impression of your book. First of all I would like to applaud you for your English. It is very well written. Then secondly you update each day and have written a decent amount of words for writing 2 weeks. The story pacing feels a little slow but I guess it's just the beginning so I'm gonna give you five stars for now. What you have to improve tho is the character design. It's not detailed enough in my opinion and I can't imagine the characters as much as I would like too, but you will get there, I hope. The world is absolutely amazing though, I love that you bring in people from real life and take the real earth as your starting background. I don't find enough novels with some realistic fantasy. So plus points for you there. All in all I would say the novel is awesome for now but there is definitely room for improvement. Keep up the good work and you will surely gain some readership. Besides me ^^

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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
    Commented

    Now it worked... weird. Well anyway good luck on your adventure gonna come back in a few days šŸ˜

    Ch 2 Humanity's Choice I
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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
    Commented

    Well let's try again. Can relate to that family situation our grandma always spoiled us when we were kids and our mom nagged almost every time that happened šŸ˜‚

    Ch 2 Humanity's Choice I
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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
    Commented

    Why isn't my comment showing here? Logged in and I can see it but otherwise not...

    Ch 2 Humanity's Choice I
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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
    Commented

    Loony bin inmates singing Christmas carols is probably the best descriptions of politicians I have ever heard šŸ¤£šŸ¤£šŸ¤£šŸ¤£šŸ¤£šŸ¤£šŸ¤£šŸ¤£šŸ¤£šŸ¤£šŸ¤£

    Ch 4 Humanity's Choice III
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  • Kuroyasha101
    Kuroyasha1011yr
    Commented

    Well first of all, First!šŸ‘ŒšŸ˜‰ And im routing for you. So far all your chapters were pretty good when there are some more im gonna rate your novel too. Lets see how much stars you get hahah

    Ch -1 Introduction&Disclaimer
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