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So as promised, here is my first impression of your book. First of all I would like to applaud you for your English. It is very well written. Then secondly you update each day and have written a decent amount of words for writing 2 weeks. The story pacing feels a little slow but I guess it's just the beginning so I'm gonna give you five stars for now. What you have to improve tho is the character design. It's not detailed enough in my opinion and I can't imagine the characters as much as I would like too, but you will get there, I hope. The world is absolutely amazing though, I love that you bring in people from real life and take the real earth as your starting background. I don't find enough novels with some realistic fantasy. So plus points for you there. All in all I would say the novel is awesome for now but there is definitely room for improvement. Keep up the good work and you will surely gain some readership. Besides me ^^