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I'm not used to reviewing things, so yeah, this is good for an early chapter, and the translation is also very good, easy to read. In terms of story, honestly this is my first time reading a horror genre fanfic, but I'm sure it's good (in my opinion), because this made me enjoy it. But well it's only 5 chapters, I don't know if it will get boring later (I hope not). I used deepl translate for this.

wow, what a messed up chapter, first mistake, mc's name at the beginning is elric takahashi, then in the middle it changes to haruka. second mistake, you also mentioned utaha goes to toyogasaki high school, and mc goes to kunigigaoka high school, so how can they be in the same school in chapter 1?, is this a writing mistake or what?.

when I read it I thought it was made with Ai, and after looking at the reviews it turns out that many people have the same opinion as me, ugh... this is bad.

Masashi Toogaito for hyouka, he is a Secondary character, his face is good, his background is also good and can give trouble to the protagonist. mashashi is a respected and influential member of the educational community and President of the Newspaper Club, it makes it difficult for him to openly open a harem in a country that does not allow polygamy.

You're wrong bro, this kind of story is perfect for "multiple POV", seeing the player play it and how they enjoy it, that's the core and the fun of this kind of story (in my opinion).

I'm not very good at making reviews, but I tried it here. I was looking for a story similar to the novel "Black tech internet Cafe system", and I found it (it took a long time), I think this story is good, it's more or less the same as the story I mentioned above, what I enjoy about this kind of story is the reaction of the players and how the players play it, and that's why I enjoy this story, although the update is a bit long (in my opinion). this is a translation, please understand.

what I'm looking for from a game making story is the reaction of the players and how the players play it, like the novel "black tech internet cafe system", here the plot is too fast and the lack of player reactions, well... there are player reactions but it's just like "Woah that's great" and a series of other compliments, without discussing how the players play it, most fanfics like this usually include several povs not only from mc but other characters, especially the players, but not here. I've only read a few chapters, I'm not dropping this, but I hope there are improvements in the story. Sorry if it's not understandable, I used translate to write this.

Did the main character's name change?

I recommend Hel, daughter of Loki from Norse mythology, as his wife.

Aku membaca sekitar 10 bab, dan itu terlalu banyak monolog, yang membuatnya membosankan, tapi ini baru 10 bab dan aku akan mencoba untuk tetap lanjut membacanya.