Show don't tell isn't the be all and end all of writing, you should use a mix of showing and telling to create a compelling narrative, you should also remember to use simpler words so that a wider audience may enjoy your book. Structure and wording are trash, while the narrative is compelling it doesn't do it for me. If you would like to get better, you should study some novels on Royal Road any of the more popular reads have a masterful mix of showing and telling.

Great concept, I just hate how blatant the use of AI is, the wording and structure of paragraphs are garbage, the cliched motivation of the main charactor ticks me off. If you corrected the horrible structure and wording of the story, then used less generic senarios I might consider reading past the 3rd chapter.

Author here: I would appreciate any criticism you may have so that I can improve my writing and create a great narrative by rectifying any mistakes I might make.