Liam_Hunt_0618

Thank you for correcting me. I have been mistaken in this case indeed. That doesn't excuse your rude behaviour, however.

I still like reading your novel. And I've got the feeling I want to finish it, means it is good in my opinion. The only flaw I can see so far are some minor mistakes in writing, but else it appears to be a well-conceived story. Definitely keep up the good work.

I think one "by" needs to be removed.

Comma before "Maya" would be good.

"his hand" instead of "her hand"

I think there is something wrong with this sentence.

It was somewhat confusing for me to follow the dialogue with so many characters appearing all of a sudden. But I still enjoyed reading, and overall this chapter is also well done. Keep it up.

I like your writing style so far. It's not too difficult to understand, yet uses some nice vocabulary and sentence structure, just perfect in my opinion. And how you tell the story is good as well. I have to admit I got really interested in your novel after reading the synopsis, and I'm not disappointed at all by the first chapter. I hope it goes on like that. No matter what, keep on writing, and all the best.

I'm glad she wasn't, since that woman appeared to be a despicable one. And I could imagine, his love is a great woman. Anyway, I really wonder now: Where is Maya Miller? Ha, what a nice cliffhanger.

Haha, just was about to say the same, but you already did. Nice one.