VitaVesuvius
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VitaVesuvius28dReplied to CharAznable- VitaVesuvius1mthReplied to Lightgiver
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filthy monkeys who can't even use—
"I lack grievances to monkeys." - VitaVesuvius1mthCommentedCh 11 Fairytale
- VitaVesuvius1mthCommented
are you trying to do a cyberpsychosis thing with the whole avatar disconnect? because I feel like that's what it is, especially with the addition of neck implant that wasn't in original overlord novels. I always wondered how they would affect an actual psychopath, guess this kinda answered my question lol.
After a few minutes of walking along the stream, Joseph got more and more used to walking in his spider body. After a while he started walking faster and faster and soon enough he was running at full speed without much issue. - VitaVesuvius1mthReplied to TypicallyMixed
it's fine, I actually appreciate you replying rather than just ignoring everything.
"Yeah, I'm fine," I slowly said, "Drop the 'Boss' though, it's getting annoying." - VitaVesuvius1mthReplied to TypicallyMixed
lol I didn't notice, my apologies if I said anything too harsh.
She sighed, "I can't exactly live in an orphanage while being a villain now can I? It's a good cover story but it will cause more problems than necessary." Of course this was only a half truth. Koko did not want this man of all people to know she cared about those in the orphanage. The real reason Koko wanted to leave was because it would put her siblings into too much danger. They were her weakness. If any of her enemies figured out her identity they would go after them first. The heroes wouldn't but the villains definitely would. 'My life is becoming to dangerous for them to be involved with it.' - VitaVesuvius1mthReplied to AchmodinIVSWE
yep, so she would also be in danger, unless she was the founding or the beast titan like you said.
"On that topic.. Well, we are not sure. The substance dissipates almost immediately whenever we try to test it." - VitaVesuvius1mthReplied to hiatusy
but why though, not like it matters to her who dies.
"Any death-inducing or existence-erasing attacks inflicted on the Conquest Devil Makima, regardless of intentions, are transferred into an appropriate illness or ailment affecting a random citizen of Japan." - VitaVesuvius1mthCommented
okay yeah, definitely a case of not knowing how to write her, this confirmed it.
Izuku took in his surroundings. This park used to be their favorite spot. He would gush about the latest activities of All Might while Koko silently listened, idly moving back and forth on the swingset. He could have sworn she had the faintest sign of a smile during those times. Maybe it was just his imagination. - VitaVesuvius1mthCommented
Sorry I keep nitpicking but.. this would have been more interesting to read if we were shown more of her personality, if she actually had muted emotions (I'm assuming this is the actual reason since the author wouldn't put it here without it being canon to her, and deku is too much of an optimist to think like that) then her caring about the orphanage would be super out of character (some people besides me found it strange too) even though most chapters are from her POV, it feels like she gets too little Screentime and I see you improved how you write characters a lot, I mean deku quirk analysis thing that was pretty much ignored in the anime, is more apparent here, his awkwardness shows too, some of his self loathing, his care for his mom, his .. complicated feelings towards bakugo etc I think you just struggle with writing her type of character because it's new to you, at least that's what I think is the correct answer from what I gathered.
It was hard not to, she was an interesting girl. Whatever it was she always kept the same indifferent attitude. He had his theories, of course. His running one was muted emotions. Maybe caused by her Quirk or something genetic. He couldn't be too sure. "Was that why she stuck around me?" He muttered darkly, "Because she didn't care enou-" Izuku caught himself, and took a glance at his mother. She hadn't noticed. He shook his head. He had been her friend and she his. It wouldn't do any good to think any other way. - VitaVesuvius1mthCommented
I definitely noticed improvements, I'm still doubtful about the characterisation of Koko, she seems a bit all over the place, a few of her actions didn't make sense too
I woke up today and decided to finish the chapter I've been slowly writing. I've been reading a web serial called Worm lately (It's really good you should read it) and I feel like my first-person writing has gotten a lot better because of it. - VitaVesuvius1mthCommented
how didn't he find her though ? unless garaki or whatever his name was covered up her quirk, for what reason though?
"Inconclusive. I haven't found anyone who registered with a water-type Quirk that specializes in bubbles. And the boy, who seems to have an energy leeching Quirk, came up with the same result." - VitaVesuvius1mthCommented
but didn't she tell them herself to call her boss? lol
"Yeah, I'm fine," I slowly said, "Drop the 'Boss' though, it's getting annoying." - VitaVesuvius1mthReplied to TypicallyMixed
at the very least make her indifferent to it, she's not a true villain if she cares about anyone but herself. honestly, if you want i can help with characterisation, I'm kinda sick and tired of not finding any evil female protagonists, Most of them are either clickbait or suck.
She sighed, "I can't exactly live in an orphanage while being a villain now can I? It's a good cover story but it will cause more problems than necessary." Of course this was only a half truth. Koko did not want this man of all people to know she cared about those in the orphanage. The real reason Koko wanted to leave was because it would put her siblings into too much danger. They were her weakness. If any of her enemies figured out her identity they would go after them first. The heroes wouldn't but the villains definitely would. 'My life is becoming to dangerous for them to be involved with it.' - VitaVesuvius1mthReplied to AchmodinIVSWE
Its's not like people who inject others with titan spinal fluid can control said titans, so she's also screwed
"On that topic.. Well, we are not sure. The substance dissipates almost immediately whenever we try to test it." - VitaVesuvius1mthCommented
I have some doubts, but we shall see
Had an idea for a villain story and decided to write it. Here's a nice short prologue chapter. - VitaVesuvius1mthPosted
- VitaVesuvius1mthCommented
didn't she say that it was as long as she perceived them as hostile?
"It's a mind control ability that stops everyone in her vision as long as she wills them to."