Hurrut

Man its a good fic so far. its just... kinda feels like its just 1 long battle. makes the world feel kinda small. like most itachi got told about the one piece world was during that seabus ride with robin. just seems kinda rushed.

good luck dude :) im sure that if you keep improving your stories will get much much better!

its a basic concept, dude gets reincarnated into a doomed timeline with powers to fix it. the thing is... the mc is literally an annoying brat that behaves like hes a philosopher. personally i believe any one piece fic should have a few things to make it an actual one piece fic instead of a harem pokemon collector. dude needs an actual dream other than collecting pokemon and the dude needs human interaction that isnt going to be collecting said pokemon and then training them with meta knowledge or whatever. mc here was given wings in chapter 2 (literally) so now author also has excuse not to write any human interaction so that shrinks the world to wherever the mc decides to appear after flying for a bit.

i tried to read it but i think i only understood like half of the 1st chapter. its just a bad china tl and it hurts my frikin brain

nice start so far! also just wanna point out that there is a pokemon tag your not using. its prob easier to find this fic via pokemon tag :)

lets cut the ai some slack :P

and you dont think a schedule she will follow for a year wont be selected?

So basically from what ive read so far its kinda lame. Someone reincarnates into Sakura but we get 0 backstory or emotion shes just kinda there now and went "oh well thats nice" gets a "genius"system that supposedly helps with stuff but it also isnt really explained and just kinda gives supposed rewards for all kinda random shit. so yeah personally its kinda lame to read and then there is the naruto handholding and then annoying cliche stuff. like mc gets to class early on 1st day after reincarnation and she gets like 3 comment of that "oh gosh you changed" and its actually just kinda sad. also feels the need to insert her into any possible situation she thinks off cuz the system says its a critical event or whatever... all in all its lame to read.

dudes been there for what? a few hours?