I don't know if I would have to edit more to be accepted it. But If there is no picture is because It wasn't enough.

Remma - 2

Remma

I don't know if I would have to edit more to be accepted it. But If there is no picture is because It wasn't enough.

Remma - 2

Remma

Japanese

OK, thanks for answering me.

If you read the comment of Neel_7(In this moment) make some advice about the story. I edit this chapter and delete the others. I make this to keep these comments.

Sakuya

I cannot access it with my laptop to webnovel. I will upload the chapters later or tomorrow. I am sorry.

I will take your advice and explain the character, the country, and the world. One will be an extra piece to add depth to the story, something optional. The others, like Chapter 0, will give the necessary context. Considering everything you said about my storytelling approach, I will change the point of view from third-person to first-person. I will occasionally switch to third-person as needed. I will also edit all the chapters. I will add these details and cut others to make the overall story coherent. I'm not sure if I'll succeed, but I will try. Thank you for your time and sorry for the long comment. I want you to know that I read your feedback, and I will do better.

I think I understand you. I create a story in my head with detailed scenes that make sense to me, but I haven't provided you with enough context to understand it. It's like starting to watch a movie halfway through; something happens, but why should you care?

Can you explain? I want to write better, if you have time, of course.

It's spam for my story. Now you can see my profile. I would appreciate it if you gave me a chance and told me what you think about the story. Is it bad, good, or so-so?

I want to make Andrew someone who normalizes violence. You think that I making him a teenager edgy. Please, tell me your thoughts.

Noelle-2

Noelle -2

Noelle