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I am Christian and have previously worked as a scriptwriter. In 2022 my short film, Bewitched won prize at the annual, Zimbabwe International Film Festival(ZIFF). I enjoy, reading, chess and swimming.

2022-12-28 JoinedZimbabwe
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo11mth
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    I enjoy your writing style, it's very lively with lots of pace. Your mostly exhibit good diction except for those instances now and again which I attribute to lack of proof reading. Otherwise the plot is quite powerful and really moves. Keep up the good work empress.

    The Nation's Goddess
    Fantasy · Dessy_Success
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo11mth
    Replied to Queen_Ana_6615

    You're welcome Queen. Don't despair when people don't review your work. It's not everyone who's work you review who will return the favour. Keep on writing and if you ever need assistance with your writing feel free to contact me.

    Married To My Best Friend (Twisted End)
    Realistic · Queen_Ana_6615
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo11mth
    Replied to AI380

    Thank you very much for the review, much appreciated. I hear your concern hence the use of inverted commas" to denote dialogue apart from narration. As for the concept I would be happy to explain it to you if you like. Please take a look at my other book, THUNDERDOM Trilogies, https://www.webnovel.com/book/thunderdom-trilogies_24939745906620705.

    NOBLE BEAST
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
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    It's a very fast paced powerful story that grips the imagination. I noticed though a couple of anomalies which I did not want to point out on the general chat. Namely a weakness with regard to diction. In chapter 32 there is a line where you say"...left chest..." The same anomaly is repeated again in another passage. Maybe you wanted to say, "left hand side of his chest". All the same notwithstanding you have an amazing story which fully immerses the reader in the fast moving story. I advise you take time to proof read your work. Congratulations on producing an outstanding masterpiece and I wish you well at the premiere of your book. Well done.

    The Exiled Lady's Rumoured Tyrant.
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
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    It's a beautifully simple plot, with good pace. It takes the reader through the daily routine of our antagonist in a very lively, engaging manner. Which brings the character's world to life, allowing the reader to get to familiarise with their personality. Your discriptions, fluency and use of simple English to make it easy for the reader to easily fall in love with the plot, is pure genius. I notice though that you started chapter 1 by just leaving Aaron Anderson hanging making me want to ask, is that the name of our protagonist? I also noted in chapter1that you opened the account by relating your character in the first person instance, but later on at the end of chapter 1 you switch to relate to your character in the third person instance. Otherwise the book is quite a good read.

    Married To My Best Friend (Twisted End)
    Realistic · Queen_Ana_6615
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
    Replied to Seiji_Shura

    Thank you very much. I 'm much obliged to you. I originally wrote NOBLE BEAST as a short story years back while living in South Africa. I only turned it into a broader length manuscript late last year, back in my native Zimbabwe. However I am now exploring the possibility of extending the book due to popular demand. As for the cover I 'm not good at designing so I just used one of my photos.

    NOBLE BEAST
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
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    Great plot I love the way you unfold your story. It's also got well paced. Doubtless this is a brilliant piece of work. I notice a few deficiencies though regarding diction. There is a line in chapter1 where you say, "...I put on a shower..." You could have said,"... take a shower...I stead. It's not the only line. I would advise that you work with someone who is proficient in the English language. Apart from that I love your work. Keep up the high standard.

    LONELINESS AND I
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
    Replied to Annabaibeauthor

    Thank you, much obliged to your ladyship for the valuable feedback.

    NOBLE BEAST
    Urban · vimbaimurindagomo
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
    Replied to Annabaibeauthor

    Where you able to read the paywalled chapters as well or did you only read the free chapters? I will be happy to give you an insight into the rest of the story.

    NOBLE BEAST
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
    Replied to Annabaibeauthor

    Thank you very much. I am pleased to have been able to create something that you truly enjoyed reading. Science fiction is a passion with me as it offers rare glimpses into technologies of the future and other vast yet to be unexplored possibilities.

    THUNDERDOM Trilogies
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
    Replied to Annabaibeauthor

    Than you for the review. I am taking your input into consideration and exploring options of how I can take the story forward. I had initially written, Noble Beast as a short story revolving around the cocktail party scene but again due to encourage from others, surprised myself and managed to expand it into a broader manuscript.

    NOBLE BEAST
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
    Posted

    Well written compelling story. I have enjoyed reading the first chapter. This language is simple making it easy for any reader to follow the story.

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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
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    A beautiful fast paced story. However the story can be far more appealing if the author will take time to proof read her work. I have noted a number errors to do with grammar as well as misuse of tense. Otherwise the story, the plot, it's an absolute winner. Great job Mira.

    will be back soon
    Urban · Mira_Cool
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
    Posted

    A beautiful story, you made several grammatical errors though. I advise you take time to proof your work. Otherwise I can see the beautiful build up with the use of colourful expression chapter1. Again the need to proof stands out, otherwise you have a compelling read. Well done.

    Once Upon A Royalty
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  • vimbaimurindagomo
    vimbaimurindagomo1yr
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    A compelling lovestory that draws in the reader right from chapter 1. It speaks to the author's prowess with the language and diction Well done Anthony's Lee Nguyen. You have produced a master piece in Book of spells.

    This book has been deleted.