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The story is good but there's so many downside. *The author always explain unnecessary things. Everything the MC do, he will explain it. Like come on man let your readers read and do the thinking. *The MCs personality, attitude is not consistent. *The author always target his/her audience. Like he wants to fight them all the time. *The author is smart but he always force some things in the plot. *The author is confused. ADVICE: *Be consistent author. Your doing good. Don't force somethings. Let the story playout. *Read the Reincarnated Assassin is a Genius Swordsman. Get some writing techniques and add it to your style.
The only problem i have is the writing style. Like come on, it's hard to read something repetitive like the way you describe Alex/shang in everything that he do. Example: Alex open his eye. Alex slowly sat up on his branch. Alex move his muscle. Alex alex and alex and shit! It's hard to read. You should use he.