JustAMan
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Author... calm down with all the blows you are giving your MC. Geez, we know he is talented.
Why!? A ninja, a professional, who is on a mission wouldn't get distracted and would try to end his mission as fast as possible without taking his time to 'test' some guenins when their sensei's are nearby. Author you could have done this better.
That's why I hate first POV... things get edgy very quick.
Mythic grade Waifu
I understand your worries, the ambiguity the jump could create, but I believe myself skilled enough to pull it up and I think that a linear narrative (Childhood, training, making of the hatsu and Waifus conquest) isn't the most appropriate for this story. If I were to narrate thing in order, it would take at least 40 chapters before getting to the Hunter Exam... Many don't have that kind of patience and by the time the exam begin, there won't be any kind of interest, already knowing how strong he is. No true tension. Some may even hate, wishing for the Waifus to be back and finding the arc useless and the nerfing (curse) irritating. Many also don't like boy MC. With this Broken narrative, the jump, I can slowly let you glimpse at his strength and in a very interesting way build his character. In one hand you have Tatsuo and on the other Lee, two facades of the same coin. I can also slowly tease the Waifus. However if this little experiment end in a failure, I'll rewrite the volume sticking with the chronological order.
You made a fan out of your writing style. Seriously, it's good, very good, and too good for this platform. Keep up the great work.
Legendary grade Waifu.
I see, but you understood at the end right? Mike was the greedy thief who got controlled by the conjured ghost inside the doll. If I had mentioned the doll at the beginning, it would have taken out the tension of the situation and the element of surprise whish motivated readers to scroll down. As for Linda, she was a captive. A girl coming out of a bandit lair... It's obvious what she went through. I'll try and make these less confusing. Thanks for the feedback.
What didn't you understand?