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The real criticism isn't even much about the characters, after all they are from a game that was inspired by a novel. The fact that the description is very overwhelming makes it almost impossible to read, I'm currently in the part where he leaves school for the first dungeon, if I'm not mistaken I'm going to the 4th chapter for him to actually enter the dungeon, the description of the black market, totally overwhelming , the constant focus on wanting to demonstrate that the MC is an observer, goes far beyond making the story complicated to read. Until now I wonder if it deserved almost an entire chapter just to show the MC walking around in the black market.
I thought I was being boring while reading, but when I saw many comments I realized that most people think that way. 1st The author, to increase the chapter, gets lost a lot in useless things, using his Observation skill as an excuse, he even mentions sweat. 2nd The author loses himself in making characters alive, no matter what world you are in, even the weakest and slowest ones, will have a group, I know that the previous owner of the body avoided this so he isolated himself, but the fact that basically everyone including the teachers, who so far in chapter 30 has not been shown any reason for this to be the case, why would a teacher, an old person with life experience, waste his time trying to belittle a student, what a weak characterization. 3rd Seriously, author, 30 chapters to tell just 3 effective days of history, and in those 3 days nothing happened, which deserves the focus on the story... 4th In 30 chapters he does not mention any fact that gives him a reason to keep a low profile, on the contrary, from what was mentioned when the characters from the main cast talked, if he shows progress he would get a better and more reserved place to train, As quoted by the Protagonist of the original story, within 30 days you will already have the availability to train in better and separate rooms.
The duel involves many more things for Jon, such as testing himself, training, and in his case, gaining prominence
and because it is a sword
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Maybe he just denied the obvious? Sometimes we do this for comfort
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