Haydon_Jackle

Already posted this review on royal road, so I'll just copy and paste. (stop spam texting me Rickey, I reviewed your story as promised) A story with potential, even if the writing is a little clunky, repetitive and simple at times. The biggest critique I have is the unclear power system. It feels indistinct and vague, but perhaps that's just because you haven't gotten the opportunity to fully explain it yet. Nevertheless, I feel that the power system is one of the first things that should be made clear, after character introductions and the like, but that's just me. Right now, I rate it a 3/5 In the future, if the world is developed well and a clear power system is explained, I'd rate it a 4/5.