Shokes
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Shokes5mthCommentedDoesn't he have a perfect memory? How did he forget saving 2 heroes in italy?
Well, I'll eat with my fingers.- Shokes5mthReplied to Blaze196
I think it should be, especially with parker's IQ.
(Felicia Hardy, I don't remember her from any movie she's seen, knew it was going to be a problem not knowing much about Marvel, but it seems like potentially dangerous characters are going to appear and I don't know anything about them, for now let's look for an abandoned warehouse, I could use the one Andrew used in the movie to practice his powers... I should train this body now or after being Spider-Man ? I guess later, then to create those social networks that do not yet exist and reap future profits). - Shokes6mthReplied to ImperialFayMonarch
Thank you, poorly edited paragraphs really chap my hide.
"alright, lets start." and he started transforming into first was partial beast form. it looked the same as scott and other betas. his face enlongated and four huge canines appear in his mouth. his eyes started shining purple. his feet started becoming padded to ensure silent movement, his hands started getting covered in silver white fur and retractable claws started appearing on his fingers. these claws looked extremely huge and sharp. his bright purple eyes were indicative of his rex or alpha status. normal weretigers have silver eyes but rex weretigers have purple eyes. he looked at the mirror that was set up and examined his body. - Shokes6mthCommented
Ok.
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Its a serious pet peeve, reading poorly written paragraphs.
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work on the written English.
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What a sad place to live in.
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No.
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Too many redundancies, all in a failed attempt to increase the word count.
To him, the chaotic pattern of electromagnetic spectra—line spectra, band spectra, continuous spectra, absorption spectra, and others emitted by the military base—appeared to form some sort of pattern amidst the gravitational distortion. - Shokes6mthReplied to WalterHeisenberg
Its not his obligation.
Ryuma did consider the possibility that he might be thinking too much. She could have just gone out for a stroll at night to clear her mind, and if that were the case, then he was worrying for no reason. However, no matter how much he tried, Ryuma just couldn't ignore the worst possibility, "Taking into account her deteriorating mental state, what if she really went for the 'what if?'" - Shokes6mthCommented
Every single reason stated aside from the marine hero threat is complete BS.
The third reason is Luffy. Luffy, Ace, and Sabo went on to share Sake Cups and became sworn brothers in the months they spent together… Currently, that hasn't happened. Luffy is still in Foosha Village pestering Shanks to take him on board, heck he hasn't even eaten his Devil Fruit yet… so there is still some time for that, and Ryuma doesn't want to rob Luffy of his childhood. After the Red Hair Pirates leave the Foosha Village, Garp would leave him at Dadan's place, someone is needed to look after him until he grows up a little otherwise god knows what will happen to that kid. - Shokes6mthCommented
What a saint! Praise Black Jesus.
Of course, Ryuma knew the reasons deep down. But he wanted to hear it from their own lips. Despite their tender age, they had already experienced more than their fair share. If they were willin' to share their reasons, it would bring him joy. In the time he spent trainin' 'em, they had grown closer to him, and Ryuma couldn't deny that he cared deeply for 'em. He wanted to help 'em, even if it was just a little bit. Especially Ace. Though the lad appeared as tough as nails on the outside, inside, he carried an immense burden. - Shokes6mthReplied to Hexylen
More like BS.
Ryuma, sensing their growth, adjusted his strategy accordingly. He showcased his mastery by countering their attacks with calculated precision, guiding them amidst the heat of battle. His voice carried over the clash of metal pipes. "Stay focused! Observe for patterns and anticipate yer opponent's moves. Remember, a warrior adapts and evolves!" - Shokes6mthCommented
I didn't think you could make it worse than it already was, but once again, you've proven me wrong.
With a sly taunt, Ryuma goaded his apprentices, his eyes gleaming with mischief. "Come on, you young rascals! Show me what ye've learned. But don't ye forget, a metal pipe won't be enough to match a warrior's unyielding spirit!" - Shokes6mthReplied to TheGreaTRylani
stop dic* ridin. We all know its awful.
Author's Note: From the next chapter, I will tone down a bit on slang, and rough language, bear with it for this one. - Shokes6mthCommented
Stick to your day job.
Tried writing using slang, village tone, and rough language, let me know what you guys think of this type of writing style. - Shokes6mthReplied to Profound_deity
The term "skedaddle" has never been used once in the history of one piece.
They laughed, thinkin' I was nothin' but a flea to squash. Another bandit chimed in with a snide remark, "Haha! You're outnumbered, kid. Throw in the towel now, and maybe we'll let you skedaddle." - Shokes6mthCommented
They sound like British country bumpkins. I don't know how a British person can sound country, but you made the impossible possible. This isn't a compliment.
Ace grinned, caught up in Sabo's excitement. "Yeah, Sabo! He's showin' those bandits who's the boss around here! I never knew someone could be that wicked cool!" - Shokes6mthCommented
BS!!!!!!!!
With a heavy heart, he laid the mother bird to rest, carefully burying her beneath a blanket of leaves and earth. He whispered a word of gratitude for her sacrifice, honoring her bravery in the face of insurmountable odds.