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Hey, This Is DaoistKy4CgX... My main account got locked, and unluckily for me my phone which has my account brokeđ.. So this is my replacement account
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DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrCommentedUhh. Is this meant to be sexual... Or just for something else... I've really really been corrupted by the internet....
Graduation- DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrCommented
Only if she knew. The boy she masturbated to was in front of her all along...
"Good morning, Mr. Bell" - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrCommentedHer wet tail began to unconsciously wag excitedly as she imagined herself helping and assisting her hero.
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Sigh... This is me... Author-kun... Are you stalking me..?
-decided to procrastinate on it. - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrCommented
... Hey!!! Why Are You Copying Me!! Seriously I'm literally doing that right now...
'...I'll leave that for future me to take care of' - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrCommented
Soo.. Basically like a Solar Eclipse?
'A hero's light driven by a pure innocent desire to save the worldâŚkept in check by a warrior's darkness who knew the world for how it truly wasâŚ' - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrReplied to'The hamster eventually jumped onto her breasts, vanishingâŚ'
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Here comes The "I wanna Be That Hamster Comments
'The hamster eventually jumped onto her breasts, vanishingâŚ' - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrReplied to Abadom
Aawwwwww!! I wanna squishh that hamsterr
(Image?) - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrCommented"If a hero in the public eye cant do it, I will simply become one that isn't...an eminence in the shadows..."
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So you said not right away... So eventually he's gonna join a Familia... Hmm I wonder what familia though..
Eina has been introduced. Explanations for why Bell is not going to accept Falna and enter a familia right away will be in the next chapter, though I did explain my ideas in reply to a comment. - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrCommentedChapter 12: Arriving at Orario. Eina Tulle
- DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrCommented(Roll credits)
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Uhh... I Totally Understood What You Said... OK fine Science Man I didn't understand it..
'Judge the concept of creation...Hypothesize the basic structure...Duplicate the composition material...Imitate the skill of its making...Sympathize with the experience of its growth...Reproduce the accumulated years...Excell in every manufacturing process.' - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrCommented
So EPIC!
The true birth of Bell Cranel. The Sword of Promised Victory. - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrReplied to Abadom
And that feels like a combination of asuna, and ais
(Here they are, there may be some problems or missing, so make sure to come back in a few hours to check everything) - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrReplied to Abadom(Here they are, there may be some problems or missing, so make sure to come back in a few hours to check everything)
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Hey!!! Why Are You Describing My Life In The Pandemic....
This was his life. A constant cycle of diving into a world he could never live in, and diving out to perform the bare minimum to ensure he could continue doing it another day, though he had long lost his sense of time and distinguished new days from when he would wake up from his sleep, with it ending when he closed his eyes to slumber once again. - DaoistKy4CgX_ver21yrPosted
Damn, Author somehow reached 15 chapters so fast!!? Sigh Fine A deal is a deal here's a review. Writing Quality (Four Stars) "The grammar is decent, however there's small grammar mistakes cluttered in some chapters, but it's mostly just using wrong tenses and spelling. But please don't overlook this author just like my English teacher once said: A small mistake will become serious if not Fixed." Story Development (Four stars) " The Story's premise is pretty cliche, however I believe that the execution is more important, and currently your doing a pretty good job. The Prologue's Quality Was also So Amazing Unfortunately There's also slight flaws because of this.. I've seen So many Authors prioritize the Prologue so much to the point the chapters following it takes a dive in quality, however it still can be fixed since this novel is pretty new. Here's some things you need to fix Ps Spoiler warning You need to add more depth and info to the story, Like when you made the Mc choose a unique skill. You can make the readers immersed by showing the other choices like the other skills could be a defense, offense, healing, poisoning etc .. Skills." Character Design (4 stars) " The mc seems to be a cliche cool mc. PS author pls make him do believable and have at least common sense (just opposite to the stereotypical Chinese Mc) " Updating Stability (4 stars) " Author you need to slowdown... I understand you mass releasing for the first few weeks.. But if you keep doing this the quality of the novel will worsen along with your time and mental health. You might even suffer a burnout and further hurt your novel. I suggest after this mass release you can adjust your schedule to posting chapters one or twice a week. And the last category.. Seriously this is so long.. World Background (4 stars) "I want To raise this higher but I can't... Author your background is interesting but your just not adding more info or supporting details..." Ps My Main Tips are just fix the grammar mistakes, you can easily fix it with some free apps. And just slow down on posting and add more detailed chapters