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SKMnovels

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    SKMnovels3mth
    Commented

    Hard to read because I felt I had to remember too many things and my attention span couldn’t keep up. Work on your chapter and please, put a synopsis

    Ch 1 Wedge
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    Player NO.1
    Fantasy · TheresaChavez
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    SKMnovels3mth
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    Drool with envy? Really? Simply “filled with envy” would’ve sufficed

    His teammates were similarly equipped, all in epic gear, a formidable lineup. Any player here would drool with envy. Even though "Eternity" had been running for years, most players still struggled for a piece of dark gold equipment; epic gear was nearly mythical!
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    Player NO.1
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    SKMnovels3mth
    Commented

    After saying “…Jason’s gear was all epic quality…” use a semi colon before describing his gear.

    Jason's gear was all of epic quality, his light blue robe flowing with magical runes, his crystal blue staff shimmering, and his accessories glinting with a red hue — the unique glow of epic gear.
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    Player NO.1
    Fantasy · TheresaChavez
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  • SKMnovels
    SKMnovels3mth
    Commented

    Another grammar error

    Jason's gear was all of epic quality, his light blue robe flowing with magical runes, his crystal blue staff shimmering, and his accessories glinting with a red hue — the unique glow of epic gear.
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    Player NO.1
    Fantasy · TheresaChavez
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    SKMnovels3mth
    Commented

    Using the apostrophe is not necessary anymore and you also incorporated it wrongly.

    Jason and his team were currently venturing into the top dungeon of "Eternity," the "Frost Crown" in hell mode. This mode had never been conquered, with the leaderboard still empty.
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    Player NO.1
    Fantasy · TheresaChavez
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    SKMnovels3mth
    Commented

    You’ve already made it clear that it is a game, no need for repetition. Also, there is an error there; Jason played AS a grand mage

    In "Eternity," a fantasy game, Jason played a grand mage. After several years of operation, most players in this world had reached the maximum level, including Jason.
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    Player NO.1
    Fantasy · TheresaChavez
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  • SKMnovels
    SKMnovels3mth
    Commented

    First things first, why don’t you have a synopsis?

    Wedge
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    Player NO.1
    Fantasy · TheresaChavez
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    SKMnovels3mth
    Replied to just_stay

    I look forward to that

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    PANDORA-Rise of the fool
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    SKMnovels3mth
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    Wasn’t even able to read the chapter because I couldn’t get any tangible info from it. Once again “show not tell” so if you can work on it, please do.

    Ch 1 SHINIGAMI
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    PANDORA-Rise of the fool
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  • SKMnovels
    SKMnovels8mth
    Replied to Fi3l

    On a side note, rate the book outta 10 and reason for rating.

    Ch 30 One year later
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    Marvel: Alpha Superhero System
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    SKMnovels8mth
    Replied to Fi3l

    Understandable since the time skip shows him having 60+ abilities. Thanks I’ll do that

    Ch 30 One year later
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    Marvel: Alpha Superhero System
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    SKMnovels8mth
    Replied to Fi3l

    Thoughts? I accept all kinds of criticism

    Ch 30 One year later
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    Marvel: Alpha Superhero System
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    SKMnovels1yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

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    SKMnovels1yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

    This book has been deleted.
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    SKMnovels1yr
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    See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

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    SKMnovels1yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

    Ch 1 Start of a New World
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    New Eden: Live to Play, Play to Live
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    SKMnovels1yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

    Ch 1 Start of a New World
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    New Eden: Live to Play, Play to Live
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    SKMnovels1yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

    Ch 1 Start of a New World
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    New Eden: Live to Play, Play to Live
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  • SKMnovels
    SKMnovels1yr
    Commented

    Not bad. You’ve inspired me to write a biography someday. My advise to you is to keep your head down and concentrate on what matters. I’m not that old, but I have gotten a number of experiences in this my short life and I know how it’s best to stay away from certain people in other to grow. “Selena” has taught you an important lesson. I don’t know what that is, but I‘m sure you already know. Live a good life Gabriel Tempo. Stay away from women until you’re ready.

    Ch 15 CHAPTER FOURTEEN – EPILOGUE
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    2022 (Based On A True Story)
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  • SKMnovels
    SKMnovels1yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

    This book has been deleted.