Maybe_you_are_whit
of reading
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Read books
Bajungas
TELLL USSS
They*
Period instead if comma and too passive
Change punctuations in this
Make this sentence more active and less confusing
This dialogue confusing
No comma may be need here but not sure
Show don't tell
But comes after the comma
Limit passive sentences
Holding back might be less wordy
Lower case And ,
Ok now you telling much and not enough showing
The whole sentence maybe
Was coming can be changed to stronger verb
Capitals
It is???
Sentence somewhat boring